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Adia Khan Posted 12 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

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The topic, which is under discussion seems to be very sagacious. The one who is farsighted, can easily perceive that when men purposes with good faith, God definitely disposes .The nature pave the way for them, who strives allot to get their objective, despite that,how difficult his objective would be to achieve.the famous scientist, Eisenstein,though gave the many theories, but his theory regarding to gravitational force ,in which he says ,” every action has a equal reaction”.it means when one put his utmost efforts to attain his goal, none could impede his way and hindered him.Efforts are like a magnet which draw the attention of success, as like fragrance of flowers attract the honey bee.Therefore one has to believe , that “God help those who help themselves”. Contrary to this, if one is not intended to do a hard work, so ,he has no right to curse his fate. Because he did nothing for the fulfillment of his purpose. As honey is for the bee who labors, and success for those; who put their all efforts to make their dream to come true.
  

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Hello, Adia Khan—and welcome to English Forums. Topics cannot be 'sagacious'; only people and their utterances can. Your use of the word there suggests to me that you are generally trying to use words of too high a register, and I suggest that you try to simplify the vocabulary and sentence structure of your whole passage.

— Mister Micawber

  • Hello, Adia Khan—and welcome to English Forums.
  • Topics cannot be 'sagacious'; only people and their utterances can.
  • Your use of the word there suggests to me that you are generally trying to use words of too high a register, and I suggest that you try to simplify the vocabulary and sentence structure of your whole passage.
  • When you have done that, I will look at it again.
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Hello, Adia Khan—and welcome to English Forums.

Topics cannot be 'sagacious'; only people and their utterances can. Your use of the word there suggests to me that you are generally trying to use words of too high a register, and I suggest that you try to simplify the vocabulary and sentence structure of your whole passage. When you have done that, I will look at it again.
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Thanks Mister Micawber, for yours guidelines, well ok i'll try to improve my writing.

Mister MicawberYour use of the word there suggests to me that you are generally trying to use words of too high a register
what it implies, sorry i'm not getting it actually.
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Adia Khanwhat it implies, sorry i'm not getting it actually.
It means that you are trying to use vocabulary words and sentence structures that are at a very advanced level.
But your English skills are only at a basic or intermediate level. So you make many mistakes.

Mister Micawber suggests that you write at a level that is at or only a small incr
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Actually i'm preparing for the exam of a commission and i have to write, an expansions,precise and essay on it. Though i took a number of classes of English to different teacher of my university. But i want to get to check my piece of writing to native speakers.who could suggest me that at where i'm making a mistakes.
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Ok thanks to guide meEmotion: heart
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Adia Khanwho could suggest me that at where i'm making a mistakes.
This is what you should write:
...who could tell me where I'm making a mistakes.

Suggest me - incorrect
that at where - incorrect
a mistakes - incorrect
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The one thing more which i want ask you that, when we have to convert the direct speech into indirect form,specially in a precise writing if there is sentences in a future form, so,can we retain it on same form, or we have to change it in a simple present .Furthermore is that which type of objectives come between has+adj+been please
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"adjectives" not objectives.
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Adia Khan convert the direct speech into indirect form,specially in a precise writing if there is sentences in a future form
Here is an example:

Direct speech (future; future):
He will ask me tomorrow, "What will you be doing next Thursday?"

Indirect speech (the same as above):
Tomorrow he will ask me what I will be doing next Thursda
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The quote which is being discuss, is taken from the writings of Francis Beacon. The best English essayist writer.He says, Age appears to be best in four things; old wood best to burn,old wine to drink,old friend to trust and old authors to read.He use word “old” four times in his such quotation. It seems that his focus is on “old”. As he says that, old wood best to burn,because the old wood is mor
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