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Azilah_sofea Posted 21 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
check my discriptive essay.please.....
MY HOUSE
I went home after almost a month in my college.The surrounding was different from before, the kitchen, the dining room,the bedrooms, the garden... most of the part of the house changed.
First I went to the kitchen, the dining table is now situated in front of the telivision and the telivision..surely a new one.The refrigerator is in the right of the telivision with lots of food in it.Then I went to my bedroom, two beds,seperated by a desk. There are lots of book on the desk, comic, novels,and some of the other reading materials. My bed look cheerfull with yellow bed sheet that patterned with blue ship and blue bear... just the way I like.The new wadrobe has been put in the end of the bed, behind the window.All my clothes in there with some new one.
I went to the living room, the sofa is situated next to the door that now in a new colour,pastel.There is a new carpet with a beautiful pattern on the floor.On the carpet was a newly purchase glass table.The room look bright wiht the sun light from the window that located just in front of the glass table.The curtain look nice, mybe it just been washed. Next, I went to the mini library just next to the living room.There are many new book on the shelves,education book, story book and many more.The table was clear and it looks like it waiting for me to use it.
I went to the front yard that now full with plants and flowers.It looks beautiful with the grass spread on the earth just like the carpet in the living room.I like the way it looks, just like the golf field.The table that made of simen situated just in the corner of the yard.That make the yard look in some kind of contemporary style.I saw my cats running around in the yard, palying with each other.
With lots of question in my head I search for my mother and asked her why things change.At last I new that I had forgotten something, I come home for my sister's wedding and taht's why things look different, it's for the wedding ceremony.So I just be ready to see the wedding and i'm sure that I will be a great wedding, maybe The Wedding Of The Year, who know......
can u all check it for me if i made errors in this essay,
I went home after almost a month in my college.The surrounding was different from before, the kitchen, the dining room,the bedrooms, the garden... most of the part of the house changed.
First I went to the kitchen, the dining table is now situated in front of the telivision and the telivision..surely a new one.The refrigerator is in the right of the telivision with lots of food in it.Then I went to my bedroom, two beds,seperated by a desk. There are lots of book on the desk, comic, novels,and some of the other reading materials. My bed look cheerfull with yellow bed sheet that patterned with blue ship and blue bear... just the way I like.The new wadrobe has been put in the end of the bed, behind the window.All my clothes in there with some new one.
I went to the living room, the sofa is situated next to the door that now in a new colour,pastel.There is a new carpet with a beautiful pattern on the floor.On the carpet was a newly purchase glass table.The room look bright wiht the sun light from the window that located just in front of the glass table.The curtain look nice, mybe it just been washed. Next, I went to the mini library just next to the living room.There are many new book on the shelves,education book, story book and many more.The table was clear and it looks like it waiting for me to use it.
I went to the front yard that now full with plants and flowers.It looks beautiful with the grass spread on the earth just like the carpet in the living room.I like the way it looks, just like the golf field.The table that made of simen situated just in the corner of the yard.That make the yard look in some kind of contemporary style.I saw my cats running around in the yard, palying with each other.
With lots of question in my head I search for my mother and asked her why things change.At last I new that I had forgotten something, I come home for my sister's wedding and taht's why things look different, it's for the wedding ceremony.So I just be ready to see the wedding and i'm sure that I will be a great wedding, maybe The Wedding Of The Year, who know......
can u all check it for me if i made errors in this essay,Top answer
Hi Azilah_sofea, Is this a school assignment? You tend to use commas where periods are needed, esp. in the "First I went to the kitchen" paragraph.
- Hi Azilah_sofea, Is this a school assignment?
- You tend to use commas where periods are needed, esp.
- in the "First I went to the kitchen" paragraph.
- Also, be careful about your sing/plural agreements.
- Hope that helps.
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Hi Azilah_sofea,
Is this a school assignment?
You tend to use commas where periods are needed, esp. in the "First I went to the kitchen" paragraph. Also, be careful about your sing/plural agreements.
Hope that helps.
Is this a school assignment?
You tend to use commas where periods are needed, esp. in the "First I went to the kitchen" paragraph. Also, be careful about your sing/plural agreements.
Hope that helps.
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Thanks for checking my essay, it helps a lot. I agree with u that i really must be careful with my sing/plur agreements, but the problem is, i got confused when i want to use it.It also same with the tenses.Can u help me with that as it really important for my study.If u have an easy way to undestand them, share with me pleazeeee
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