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DATE: June 5, 201x



TO: Larry LaGrange, Vice President, Operations



FROM: Elyse Ellerman, Manager, and Accounting



SUBJECT: INSTALLATION OF UNDERCARPET WIRING



Proposal



Because the Accounting Department needs a flexible economical wiring system that can accommodate our ever changing electrical needs. That’s why I propose that we install a flat under carpet wiring system.



Present System



At this time the Accounting Department has an out of date system of floor wiring and power poles that limit us to surface wiring. This network of surface wiring appears to be totally overwhelmed by the demands we are now placing on them. The operation of 27 pieces of equipment in addition to 34 telephone lines requires extensive electrical circuits and cabling. Moreover, our overhead lighting, which consists of fluorescent fixtures in a suspended egg-crate structure, contains excessive wiring above the ceiling. Technicians whom have come to our office have said that it’s the worse system they have ever seen.



Advantages of Proposed System



Cabling for telephone, power, and data are now available in a flat form only .043 inches thick. This flat flexible cable can be installing underneath existing carpeting, thus preventing costly and disruptive renovation. Under carpet wiring would mean less office power poles. Moreover, flat cables can be moved easy, giving us accountant’s greater flexibility when we need to add equipment. Having a under carpet wiring system all ready installed in the Accounting Department would also enable the company to evaluate the systems effectiveness before considering it for other departments. It also comes with a ten year warranty.



Cost and Savings



Suppliers and consultants estimate that an under carpet wiring system for the Accounting department would cost about $50,000. If we were to use conventional methods to install round wiring, we would have to renovate our entire department, costing over $200,000. Equally important, however, is the savings in terms of productivity and employee satisfaction. Which would decline if renovation was required?



Please let me know by June 10 whether you want me to proceed with this project.

  

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I have underlined some problem areas: DATE: June 5, 201x TO: Larry LaGrange, Vice President, Operations FROM: Elyse Ellerman, Manager , and Accounting SUBJECT: INSTALLATION OF UNDERCARPET WIRING Proposal Because the Accounting Department needs a flexible economical wiring system that can accommodate our ever changing electrical needs ( This is an incomplete sentence ). That’s why I propose that we install a flat under carpet wiring system. Present System At this time the Accounting Department has an out of date system of floor wiring and power poles that limit us to surface wiring.

  • I have underlined some problem areas: DATE: June 5, 201x TO: Larry LaGrange, Vice President, Operations FROM: Elyse Ellerman, Manager , and Accounting SUBJECT: INSTALLATION OF UNDERCARPET WIRING Proposal Because the Accounting Department needs a flexible economical wiring system that can accommodate our ever changing electrical needs ( This is an incomplete sentence ).
  • That’s why I propose that we install a flat under carpet wiring system.
  • Present System At this time the Accounting Department has an out of date system of floor wiring and power poles that limit us to surface wiring.
  • This network of surface wiring appears to be totally overwhelmed by the demands we are now placing on them.
  • The operation of 27 pieces of equipment in addition to 34 telephone lines requires extensive electrical circuits and cabling.
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I have underlined some problem areas:


DATE: June 5, 201x



TO: Larry LaGrange, Vice President, Operations



FROM: Elyse

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