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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high

school programes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or

teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Joining in community activities has been a heated topic constantly. There is a common

belief that students should participate in unpaid public service as an obligatory section in

high school. I completely agree with this statement.

I believe this notion should be supported because of two benefits it brings to pupils. Firstly,

the most obvious advantage is to assist students develop their soft skills which is actually

essential for success in life. Through community services, high school students may learn

how to work in teams, empathy and self-discipline. For example, my friend in university

volunteered to spend 3 weeks in Cao Bang province in order to teach disadvantageous

children. I realized that she became a more energetic person and much higher work ethic

when she returned to her studies.

In addition, I am strongly convinced that helping others without expecting anything in

return is necessary in an emotionless society currently. This may be find difficult

in beginning because they are not familiar with it. However, children are going to be the

initiative people if they are guided the right method.

Although, th ere are several people said that engaging th ese activities is waste time and has

a negative effect to high school children. However, I rely on its value is far more than the

downside.

In conclusion, teachers should enforce joining in community sevices upon teenagers in

order to improve their personality.