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Chiara Posted 19 years ago
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charity day

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11font10Hello, it's too long to write the title of the task..., I hope somebody can help me correcting it.12font12br
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10Chiara 12font12br
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10Dear Editor,12br
10my name is XY, I have actively taken part in organizing the charity day for the local hospital in Cooper's Park on Saturday.12br
10I'm writing to complain about the wrong information you provided in your article about the event.12br
10For the benefit of the hospital the organisation works for, it is very important that people know the real facts. 12font12br
11font10First of all I need to say that the organisation never stated that the event would have guested 45 stalls but only 35, of whom only one was missing.12br
10Secondly I wouldn't call a dounpour of rain few drops of water which didn't demage the event at all.12br
10Therefore I totally disagree with your assumption that the event didn't reached its figure target, because, at the opposit, it was a great success for us. 12font12br
11font10Finally I have to correct the wrong information you provided12br
10about the cost of the event which was lower then what you reported. 12br
10The total amount of the organisation cost was only the 15% of which the 10% was for the entertainment and the 5% for the administration cost, so that the 85% of the income, and not the 60% as you stated, was given to the the hospital. 12font12br
11font10Since your magazine's wrong report can seriously demage the hospital for which our fund-raising events are very important,12br
10we ask you to apologize publically in your magazine about what happen. You would help us to keep on working successfully for the hospital as we did in the last charity day. 12font12br
11font10Yours sincerely,12br
10XY12font12br
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  • ) in organizing the charity day for the local hospital in Cooper's Park on Saturday.
  • 22br 21font 20For the benefit of the hospital the organisation works for, it is very important that people know the real facts.
  • 22font 22font 22br 22br 21font 21font 20 22font 20First of all21b 21u 20,22u 22b 20 21font 20I need to say that 22font 20the organisation never stated that the event would have 21b 20guested 45 stalls but only 35, of whom only one was missing.
  • 22br 22font 22br 22br 21font 20Finally21u 21b 20,22b 22u 20 21font 20I have to correct the wrong information you provided about 22font 20the cost of the event 21font 20which 22font 20was lower th21font 20e22font 20n (please correct the spelling) what you reported.
  • )21u 20 22u 20(10% for the entertainment provided and 5% for the administration cost), so 21font 20that the 22font 2085% 21font 20of the income22font 20, 21font 20and22font 20 not the 60% as you stated, 21u 20of the raised sum is 22u 20given to the 21del 20the 22del 20hospital.
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