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Hamooor Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

cat accident

This is a really story
I saw it before some monthes

when i was going th restaurant to bring lunch , before i stop in parking
see two cats play together , one of them black , other is brown
after bring car to paking , and go to restaurant
i wait the road to be empty before i pass it and i was looking to cats
black cat try to pass the road , brown is wait it
one of the car coming speedy and crash the black cat
directly i look to brown cat
it was looking sadly
look to it`s friend when it start to leave the live
the blood was start going out of cat`s body
from it`s head
it jump raondom and cry ,it`s body was vibating
then it stop
thear is o any move , on any sound
the cat died
the brown cat still stand and look
it can not do any thing
just it go and look close to it , to see if black cat still alive
after it konw the black cat is died
it go away to car`s parking and disappear under the cars

The End

If thear are any mistake in grammer or write tell me

Thanks Advance
  

Top answer

-- there are many mistakes. Here is your first sentence corrected: This is a true story. I saw it happen some months ago .

  • -- there are many mistakes.
  • Here is your first sentence corrected: This is a true story.
  • I saw it happen some months ago .
  • First, you should review your composition and put it into a paragraph form instead of using a new line for each sentence.
  • Put a capital letter at the beginning of each sentence and a full stop (a period) at the end of each sentence.
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Interesting story, Hamooor, but-- oh dear!-- there are many mistakes. Here is your first sentence corrected:


This is a true story. I saw it happen some months ago.
First, you should review your composition and put it into a paragraph form instead of using a new line for each sentence. Put a capital letter at the beginning of each sentence and a full stop (
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Hi Mister Micawber

thank you very very much , This is what I want , mistakes

I will try to rewrite the story in other form

any body can help me and rewrite it , no problem , and thanks to him

thanks
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No body can help me ????????
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You haven't tried to correct any of it yourself yet, Hamoor-- not even regarding the guidelines I gave you! No one is going to help such a lazy person.
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00i agree with you Micawber. 0-

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