Can you tell me what my writing gets wrong ?

Title : Writing for Submission


To discuss this topic , the definition of submission is inevitable , subjected or voluntarily to submit the writing ? As a secondary 6 students , knowledge can't be counted even though the curriculum is restricted in certain areas . When you learn a new thing in the school , street , library or recreational areas , you always try to memorize those knowledges that is useful into your brain . To memorize knowledges , serious writing is the most straight way in memorizing . Do you agree with my opinion?

In a knowledged-based society , knowledge equals to skills , less skillful means lack of working conditions . Suppose every person are hard-working , is it impossible to be a lazy guy ?

Similarly , suppose every submitted writing of employing letters are well-elaborated and well-organized , is it impossible to submit a low-valued writing ? That's absoulutely possible .

Therefore , please don't always say financial crisis make you disappointed . The confirmed case is refutable notwithstanding your confidant disagree with this . Can everybody brainstorm 2 minutes and then be a fresh person ?

Only one reason and just because of it . To begin in this second , you should never be pessimestic but optimistic . It isn't a joke . We hope that you will be a honest , hard-working , self-controlled and kind person in every minutes . Don't think that it is wrong or impossible ?

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