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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure.

What do you think are the causes of this?

What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays, many students, especially undergraduates spend time for part-time jobs instead of concentrating full-time on studying. As a result, students deal with time management issues like the loss of concentration on education and also experience constant pressure. In my opinion, there are several factors that lead to this tendency and it can be resolved by various measures.
This tendency is inevitable and can be attributable to two reasons. First and foremost, many universities intend to improve the education quality hence the tuition fee increase concomitantly. Unfortunately, some students with inadequate finance are incapable of paying the fees. Moreover, occupations that are available for the student often are unqualified jobs and low-paid jobs as well, forcing them to work more. Secondly, students desiring to have activities or internships at school, find that it is useless and not practical, and finding a job would help them to gain more experiences. Indeed, instead of waiting for support from the school, the majority of students take the initiative to better their hands-on skills and their strengths.
There are two possible solutions for this trend. Firstly, the government and educational ministry can provide financial aid for students with difficult backgrounds. This assistance can be implemented bases on the academic achievement and difficulty of students. For example, many competitions have been established to give scholarships to worthy students. The second solution to be considered is allocating the budget for the activities at school.
In conclusion, the main reason why students have difficulty devoting time is the shortage of finance and could be solved by assistance. A case in point is the contests to reward the scholarship.