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Is it morally wrong or right to keep animals in zoos? Many people would immediately say that it is absolutely wrong, but who would answer it is morally good? Here I am going to contrast two different points of view: whether it is right or wrong to keep poor creatures in cages and enclosers. What is your opinion?
On the one hand most of you believe that is violent to make defenceless animals live in the closed area. It is monotonous, exhausting, wasting for them since they wish they were at liberty without people talking and watching them everywhere. Animals are deprived of their natural habitat, the room they are given may be not enough, they are also forced into close proximity with other species and human beings which may be unnatural for them, they frequently become bored and depressed and etc.
However (although), on the other hand animals can live longer lives in zoos than on the nature. Therefore, many agree with this factor. A big number of people really regard it as a reason some animals should inhabit in the zoo. Also, rare species are more convenient to keep in the artificial environment than if they lived in the field or in the mountains. In zoos they get the unnecessary caress and custody – food, water, the room, games... Keeping animals in zoos protects them from different kinds of poachers and other harmful things, as well.
Consequently, there is no any common estimation of animals being kept in zoos. Some share opinion that it is bad but some that it is quite good. Personally, I count it does not make any sense of having animals in zoos as it is made only for people’s fun but in a very few cases for their safety and propagation.