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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
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Can you please highlight the mistakes in my blog for class.

When I was started the sixth grade, I noticed that I was different from everyone. I was not as handsome or pretty as everyone else. I hated going to going to school and I did not being at home either. My mom or dad did not like me. My father left my mom because he found out that she was having triplets. Days after I was born he left and I never saw him again. I was told that he only married my mom for citizenship into the United States.

My mother hates me. She made sure that my life was horrible. First, she born me with very dark skin, UGLY, and by her marrying a man from another continent that affected my speech. So now I talk "funny." I realized that if any girl who found me attractive also like enjoys nailing their hands to a wall or in need of a psychological evaluation. Next, my mom refused to work which I found confusing because she has a master's degree and fully functional legs and arms so I never had the nice things that everyone had. It was my 20th birthday a normal twenty-year old gets a new car or jewelry from their parents, I received an old pair of girl's pants. I was disappointed and very upset and I left in her house the entire day not able to go anywhere.

Also, she would do anything to embarrass me. I met a girl named Mariah and we began dating my senior year in high school but I never told my mom mainly because I knew that she would have something negative to say about it. I was right!! On Thanksgiving my mom found out so she began asking me bizarre questions like "Did you go up and talk to her? Did you ask her out on a date?" The look on her face said it all she was shocked that I had a girlfriend mainly because she knew that I was an UGLY monster. I said to myself "WOW! My mom thinks I am ugly maybe she should have born me. I would have been better off"

I wondered to myself, why when I walk into a room everyone starts laughing? Even teachers would laugh at me. My English 4 teacher who I will not name referred to me as a "hideous rabbit eater." My history teacher, who I am related to made my time in her class a living hell. Everyday she would make fun of the way I look. That was the day that I realized that it is Daniel versus the World.

What do students do during Thanksgiving and Christmas Breaks? They go home and be with their family, eat food, and enjoy their time off from school. I on the other hand sit in a hotel room eating pizza without any of my family there.

So tell me this is the United States Declaration of Independence correct stating that "All men are created equal?"

  • Was I given a fair chance to succeed in life?
  • Is Tom Brady and I equals?
  • Is this famous quote correct? "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder"

NO!!

  

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Hi Daniel; I've highlighted some areas that need attention. Regards, A- s When I was started the sixth grade, I noticed that I was different from everyone else . ) .

  • Hi Daniel; I've highlighted some areas that need attention.
  • Regards, A- s When I was started the sixth grade, I noticed that I was different from everyone else .
  • ) .
  • (you can combine this sentence with the previous) I hated going to going to school and I did not being at home either.
  • My mom or dad did not like me.
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Hi Daniel;
I've highlighted some areas that need attention.

Regards,
A-Emotion: stars

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