Can you please help me with my essey?

The text below is a revision of description of me

When I first read the description of me I felt that my face is blushing. It is good to know that you are making a really good impression on others.
In the begining Kamila wrote about me that I`am outgoing and passionate about life – I could not agree more. If had to describe myself I would have wrote exactly the same thing. In the decription she noticed special link beetween me and my family, which is the most important in my life. So as friends and I admit that I love cooking for them. Kamila mentioned that I take delight in doing household chores and listening to music. I must say that I cannot imagine cleaning without singing with radio or any music channel on TV.
However, I cannot agree with some stated facts. I believe that the fact that I am very honest person is not a good feature. For me there is no point in beating about the bush. Some people might consider this as my disadvantage. Also, I cannot tell about myself that I am a very mature person. I can be very moody and sometimes I act like a children. Moreover, some people who do not know me, sometimes think that I`m 15 years old.
To sum up, Kamila did a great job describing me and im glad that she sees me in a good light.