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Task 2: Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Here is my essay:

Many people argue that physical strength is a crucial factor to the success of sport. While there might be reasons for the priority of physical health, I maintain that having a healthy mind is of great importance to succeed in sport.

On the one hand, strength is a required element for sport. If an athlete doesn’t have a healthy body, they can get sick easily and won’t be able to join the competitions they have been waiting for, however hard they have tried to achieve their goals. There are many sports competitors who have to drop out of their contest because of their illnesses. Therefore, they won’t be able to fulfill their dreams of becoming a professional athlete.

On the other hand, there are several reasons why emotional wellbeing should be given more attention. It’s the driving force that leads sportsmens to success. When their bodies are physically exhausted, their mind will be responsible for the result of the match. Take Hanyu Yuzuru, a Japanese figure skater for example. In spite of his injured ankle, he still joined the 2018 Winter Olympics and in the end won a silver medal and surpassed his own World’s record in the last years. Consequently, he will be able to achieve a more fruitful career in the future.

In short, both mental and physical health are significant to athletes in their career path, but I believe that their mind is the decisive element. In my opinion, government should spend more money on psychological therapy in order to improve sportsmens’ performance

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