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In this age when spirituality and moral values are scarce, and with materialism on the rise, people are susceptible to worries and anxieties. Thus, conscious efforts are must to ensure the religious growth of people whereby they can find an outlet to dispel their worries. Though disliked by many in the beginning these efforts are really worth the time and energy spent.

Not everyone is enough prudent to understand the significance of seemingly mundane rituals which constitute the spiritual process like chanting the name of god, thanking the lord for the food and family and also going to church every weekend. While doing these activities the soul is transiently disconnected from the material world hence connecting us with the divine. No doubt, spirituality has a profound effect on everyone’s life who makes a prodigious attempt to change their life. Hoping an expeditious success in this journey is foolishness as it itself is anti-spiritual and anti-nature. So, at the outset a person might have to build trust with god, and appreciate every opportunity to be grateful for everything bestowed upon us. The apparent positive changes an individual observes in his life are not incidental advantages of spirituality. Neither are they co-incidences. In fact, these are the fruits of the good deeds which you commit throughout the day listening to your conscience. Once a person starts listening to his conscience then it is not obligatory to follow the rituals as they have served their purpose to connect you with your inner self. However, ego should be kept in check because many aspirants fall prey to its claws even in the later stages. Spirituality is a perpetual, conscientious, and worth-trying path for everyone.