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Achucoul Posted 11 years ago
Grammar
Can you please correct the sentences
Dear Mr. Joseph,
We would like to thank you for your valuable enquiry,
With reference to the above subject and further to the telephonic discussion I had with your good self, we are pleased to attach herewith our lowest offer for the products you have enquired.
We look forward to receive your valuable order.
In case of any clarification, don’t hesitate to contact us.
Thanking and assuring you our best services at all times.
We would like to thank you for your valuable enquiry,
With reference to the above subject and further to the telephonic discussion I had with your good self, we are pleased to attach herewith our lowest offer for the products you have enquired.
We look forward to receive your valuable order.
In case of any clarification, don’t hesitate to contact us.
Thanking and assuring you our best services at all times.
Top answer
I could make some small corrections. But I think it might be more helpful if I showed you how I would word it: Dear Mr. Joseph, We would like to thank you for your recent enquiry.
- I could make some small corrections.
- But I think it might be more helpful if I showed you how I would word it: Dear Mr.
- Joseph, We would like to thank you for your recent enquiry.
- Following the telephone conversation we had with you, detailing your requirements, we are pleased to submit to you our best price for the products you are interested in.
- ) We look forward to receiving your complete order.
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I could make some small corrections. But I think it might be more helpful if I showed you how I would word it:
Dear Mr. Joseph,
We would like to thank you for your recent enquiry.
Following the telephone conversation we had with you, detailing your requirements, we are pleased to submit to you our best price for the products you are interested in. (See the attach
Dear Mr. Joseph,
We would like to thank you for your recent enquiry.
Following the telephone conversation we had with you, detailing your requirements, we are pleased to submit to you our best price for the products you are interested in. (See the attach
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achucoultelephonic discussionThis is odd because it is unnatural. Telephone would be the correct word.
In general, your text is excessively formal and unnatural. You should simplify it, as suggested in the other reply.
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