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Eligija Posted 11 years ago
Letter Writing

Can you help me with my motivation letter

Hey, I'm applying to the universities and I really need your help with my motivation letter, I am not really good in writing sth especially in english because is not my native language. So please check my grammar, structure and tell me everything that is bad in this letter. It is not finished yet so maybe you will be able to help me with the ending too.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the degree of Medicine.

Since I was a child I had a dream to save a life. As I was growing the dream grew with me and now even a thought of becoming a doctor means a lot to me and makes me try even harder to accomplish it.

I always felt that I have to do something important in my life. And when I realised that I am gifted with an amazing memory which with unconventional thinking helped me to succeed in biology, chemistry and maths, I chose to study medicine.

Introducing myself I would like to say that I am a perfectionist, I do everything that I can to achieve my goal, I am enthusiastic in the field that I love, I remember once in eleventh grade we had one task in maths that no one solved except me but it was a hard 3 hours of looking at it, thinking and believing that I can solve it. I am a stubborn person and I believe that it is a positive side of me which is helping me every day.

I chose England instead of my motherland because of the opportunity to know more about regenerative medicine and maybe to study it. A couple years ago I saw a documentary about it and since then I am really interested with it’s possibility to make progress in medicine. One more reason was that I spent two summers in England and I fell in love with this country, it’s architecture and mostly the language.
  

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Eligija Hey, I'm applying to the universities Unless you mention particular universities, you should drop the . Eligija I am not really good in writing I am not really good at writing Eligija especially in english especially in E nglish Eligija because is not my native language. because it is not my native language.

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  • Eligija Hey, I'm applying to the universities Unless you mention particular universities, you should drop the .
  • Eligija I am not really good in writing I am not really good at writing Eligija especially in english especially in E nglish Eligija because is not my native language.
  • because it is not my native language.
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EligijaHey, I'm applying to the universities
Unless you mention particular universities, you should drop the.
EligijaI am not really good in writing
I am not really good at writing
Eligijaespecially in
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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the degree of Medicine.(You are not applying for the degree, but to study in the Medical School).

Since I was a child I have had a dream to save a life (lives?) (You can rephrase - When I was a child, I had...). As I was growing the dream grew with me and now even the thought of becoming a doctor mea
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AlpheccaStarsAs I was growing
As I was growing up
AlpheccaStarsI do everything that I can to achieve my goal,
I do everything that I can to achieve my goals,
AlpheccaStarsA
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AnonymousAs I was growing up
There is nothing wrong with the original.
AnonymousI do everything that I can to achieve my goals,
There is one goal - to be a doctor. Making it plural dilutes the motivation.
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AlpheccaStarsAnonymousAs I was growing upThere is nothing wrong with the original.
Maybe in US English. Outside the USA, it is normally growing up.
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