Can you help me polish these sentences? Thank you!

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Learning French needs great input. My friend Michael who majored in French, had to wake at 6 o’clock every morning reading some vocabulary.  When he was free, he was trying to communicate with French online. And he made lots of  French friends. In the end, he made a great progress. He can communicate with French freely now. Therefore, if we are patient and persist in studying, we will make progress.

Dimsumexpress · Accepted Answer

Can you help me polish these sentences

jiangyueming Learning French needs great input. My friend Michael who majored in French, had to wake at 6 o’clock every morning reading some vocabulary. When he was free, he was trying to communicate with French online. And he made lots of French friends. In the end, he made a great progress. He can communicate with French freely now. Therefore, if we are patient and persist in studying, we will make progress.

Hi,
This is how I see your paragraph.

I have to be careful with my comments because "polish" connotes refinement or achieving perfection. Your paragraph is easily understood and you have followed the capitalization and punctuation rules. But logically, learning any new language requires a lot of time, hard work and patience. So the semantics of the first sentence seems rather fuzzy in my opinion. What are you trying to include by "great input"? In order to "polish" the passage, I think the fluency needs to be improved before any "polishing" can be done. So I'd rather restrain on offering my revision as it may require significant change in the wording.

Jiangyueming · Answer

Thank you. Maybe I supposed to use the word "correct" instead of "polish". Here is my revision.
Learning French requires a lot of efforts. My friend Michael who majored in French, had to wake at 6 o’clock every morning reading some vocabulary. When he was free, he was trying to communicate with French online. After two years, he made lots of French friends. In the end, he made a great progress. He can communicate with French freely now. Therefore, if we are patient and persist in studying, we will make progress.

CalifJim · Answer

jiangyuemingLearning French needs great input. My friend Michael who majored in French, had to wake at 6 o’clock every morning reading some vocabulary. When he was free, he was trying to communicate with French online. And he made lots of French friends. In the end, he made a great progress. He can communicate with French freely now. Therefore, if we are patient and persist in studying, we will make progress.

Learning French takes a lot of effort. For example, my friend Michael, a French major, used to get up at 6 every morning to study vocabulary. In his free time he practiced French on an on-line forum, where he made a lot of French friends. In the end he made such great progress that he can now communicate fluently in French. This shows that if we are patient in our studies, we too can succeed in learning a new language.

CJ

Jiangyueming · Answer

It looks much better! Thank you!

Can you help me polish these sentences? Thank you!

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