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Is current academic grading helpful in performance? Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Nowadays, some people believe that our current academic grading plays an important role in school and this is a useful tool to help students improve their performances. In my opinion, I strongly agree with that point of view.First of all, the fact that grades are very good indicators of knowledge. This indicator shows students’ knowledge and how they did in their exam. The test and grading may force a student to comprehend a concept. If the student fails in the test and receive a poor grade, that means they didn’t understand the concept properly. As a result, they may experience with learning how to improve their test- taking skills. Besides, teacher can know the current level and the problems of each students in order to find solutions for them.On the other hand, I believe that current academic grading is helpful in improving students’ performances. The threat of a bad grade may make a student try to comprehend the concept in her or his test. It leads to they should have a better preparation such as an extra revision or trying to show their best performances to get the higher marks on the incoming exam. Moreover, grading is also one of requirement of higher education’s entrance like college and university. As a consequence, students have to strengthen their grades by enhancing their performance.In conclusion, there is no doubt that academic grading encourages students to learn, gain more knowledge and improve their performances. Moreover, they will feel more self- confident with some small victories that leads to win and succeed in the future.(264 words)

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Nowadays,[implies the situation has changed vis-a-vis the past: I would suggest this is not what you mean.] some people believe that our current academic grading plays an important role in school and this is a useful tool to help students improve their performances. In my opinion, [redundant: 'I strongly agree' is quite enough] I strongly agree with that point of view.

First of all, the fact [is] that grades are very good indicators of knowledge. This indicator shows students’ knowledge and how they did in their exam. The test and grading may force a student to comprehend a concept. If the student fails in the test and receive[s] a poor grade, that means they didn’t[Do not use contractions in IELTS or formal writing] understand the concept properly. As a result, they may experience with learning-> learn by experience? how to improve their test- taking skills. Besides, [Inappropriate in this context: avoid over-use of connective linking adverbs to start a sentence.] [missing article or use plural]teacher can know the current level and the problems of each students[singular/plural issue] in order to find solutions for them.

On the other hand, [This suggests a change of tack, but it seems to be more in the same vein, so misleading linkage.]I believe that current academic grading is helpful in improving students’ performances. The threat of a bad grade may make a student try to comprehend the concept in her or his test. It leads to they should have a better preparation -> It may lead to better preparation such as an extra revision or trying to show their best performances to get the higher marks on the incoming exam. ~~Moreover~~, grading is also one of requirement of higher education’s entrance like college and university. ~~As a consequence~~, students have to strengthen their grades by enhancing their performance. Sometimes better without linkage words.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that academic grading encourages students to learn, gain more knowledge and improve their performances. Moreover[again!], they will feel more self- confident with some small victories that leads [singular/plural? ]to win and succeed[grammar issue: these need to be nouns -> to winning and success] in the future.

Comment: I felt the content and the points made were repetitive. You need more material and examples in your planning, or more development and argumentation. As it stands, your content score is at risk of being downgraded.

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Is current academic grading helpful in performance? Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

What is the "following statement"?

Nowadays, some people believe that our current academic grading plays an important role in school and this is a useful tool to help students improve their performances. (wrong form) In my opinion, I strongly agree ("agree" means it is your opinion. "In my opinion " is completely redundant.) with that point of view.

First of all, the fact that grades are very good indicators of knowledge. (This is a noun phrase. It is not a sentence.) This indicator shows students’ knowledge and how they did in their exam. The test and grading may force a student to comprehend a concept. If the student fails in the test and receive (wrong form) a poor grade, that means they didn’t understand the concept properly. As a result, they may experience with learning how to improve their test- taking skills. Besides, teacher (wrong form) can know the current level and the problems of each students (wrong form) in order to find solutions for them.

On the other hand, (wrong usage. This phrase introduces the opposite view. ) I believe that current academic grading is helpful in improving students’ performances. The threat of a bad grade may make a student try to comprehend the concept in her or his test. (wrong usage, Also this is exactly the same point as in your previous paragraph.) It leads to they should have a better preparation (wrong usage. A finite , or full, clause is incorrect here.) such as an extra revision or trying to show their best performances to get ~~the~~ higher marks on the incoming (wrong word) exam. Moreover, grading is also one of requirement (wrong form) of (wrong word - for) higher education’s entrance like college and university. As a consequence, students have to strengthen their grades by enhancing their performance.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that academic grading encourages students to learn, gain more knowledge and improve their performances. Moreover, they will feel more self- confident with some small victories that leads to win and succeed (wrong form) in the future.

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