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Ellee Posted 15 years ago
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Chiledu threw off his robe and sat on the grass naked waist-deep, dappled shadows spotted his swarthy skin; blissfully smiling, he watched every motion of Oeloon.
The hourse, nibbling grass, suddenly raised its head and neighed (here in the original text there's an adverb meaning "like it tried to call attention/ calling upon"). A neigh back was heard in the willow thickets.
The hourse, nibbling grass, suddenly raised its head and neighed (here in the original text there's an adverb meaning "like it tried to call attention/ calling upon"). A neigh back was heard in the willow thickets.
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You over-punctuate instead of composing more carefully. Chiledu threw off his robe and sat on the grass naked to the waist , shadows dappling his swarthy skin. Blissfully smiling, he watched Oeloon's every motion.
- You over-punctuate instead of composing more carefully.
- Chiledu threw off his robe and sat on the grass naked to the waist , shadows dappling his swarthy skin.
- Blissfully smiling, he watched Oeloon's every motion.
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- An answering neigh came from the willow thicket.
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You over-punctuate instead of composing more carefully.
Chiledu threw off his robe and sat on the grass naked to the waist, shadows dappling his swarthy skin. Blissfully smiling, he watched Oeloon's every motion. The grazing horse suddenly raised its head and neighed inquisitively (?). An answering neigh came from the willow
Chiledu threw off his robe and sat on the grass naked to the waist, shadows dappling his swarthy skin. Blissfully smiling, he watched Oeloon's every motion. The grazing horse suddenly raised its head and neighed inquisitively (?). An answering neigh came from the willow
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