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Jiangyueming Posted 13 years ago
Grammar

Can you help me correct three sentences? Thank you

I choose advertising as my career because of my interest rather than money. Everyday I work with the most creative people in my country and it makes me passionate about my job even though my salary is so-so. We work overtime in order to brainstorm a creative campaign that can interact with our potential consumers.
  

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I chose advertising as my career out of interest rather than for the money. Every day I work with the most creative people in the country, and this makes me passionate about my job even though my salary is so-so. We work overtime in order to brainstorm a creative campaign that can interact with our potential consumers.

— Blue Jay

  • I chose advertising as my career out of interest rather than for the money.
  • Every day I work with the most creative people in the country, and this makes me passionate about my job even though my salary is so-so.
  • We work overtime in order to brainstorm a creative campaign that can interact with our potential consumers.
  • I'm not sure about the last sentence.
  • It is jargon-laden, which bothers me, but it may be appropriate for your intended audience if they use similar jargon themselves.
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I chose advertising as my career out of interest rather than for the money. Every day I work with the most creative people in the country, and this makes me passionate about my job even though my salary is so-so. We work overtime in order to brainstorm a creative campaign that can interact with our potential consumers.
I'm not sure about the last sent
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