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Jiangyueming Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Can you help me correct these sentences? Thank you!

Li and Du both were the preeminent poets in Tang Dynasty. Li became Du’s friend immediately when they met. Nevertheless, they had to separate soon,because Du had to move to another city to visit his relatives. Du usually wrote some poems to express his wishes to meet Li. And these poems are very popular now and become a symbol of their friendship. So long distance won’t make two good friends separate. On the contrary, due to long distance, friendship can become more stable.
  

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" They can't both be preeminent. "In Tang Dynasty" is unidiomatic. " This is good English, but the time sequence feels a bit off, and I would guess that their friendship ran both ways.

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  • " They can't both be preeminent.
  • "In Tang Dynasty" is unidiomatic.
  • " This is good English, but the time sequence feels a bit off, and I would guess that their friendship ran both ways.
  • " I don't know what Du actually did, so I can't suggest a revision.
  • " This is good English, but I think you wanted different words for your meaning.
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"Li and Du both were the preeminent poets in Tang Dynasty." They can't both be preeminent. "In Tang Dynasty" is unidiomatic. Try, "Li and Du were the finest poets of the Tang Dynasty."

"Li became Du’s friend immediately when they met." This is good English, but the time sequence feels a bit off, and I would guess that their friendship ran both ways. I'd like to see something more like, "W
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Thank you so much. Your revision flows more readily.
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