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They didn’t have money to go to school. In my village, there were only four or five children who could afford the tuition. Receiving education was always a dream for my father and his peers. Nevertheless, most of people were struggling to subsist. How can you expect them to receive education? After the economic reform, people are wealthier. More and more people could afford the tuition. The number of school was increasing rapidly. Thus, people have more money and can receive education now.

Gigilian Nguyen · Accepted Answer

Hi Yue Ming, it's a good writing

I just have some suggestions:

They didn't have (enough) money to go to school. (You can add enough if you want, because in that situation, people just hardly had money for their accommodations, food, clothes,... but not education yet)

In my village, there were only four or five children who could afford the tuition. (This sentence's grammar is okay, but the meaning sounds a bit strange, do you think so?

Because they were children, how could they afford the tuition themselves? It would be: In my village, there were only four or five childrenwhose families/parents could afford the tuition.)

Receiving education was always a dream for my father and his peers. Nevertheless, most of people were struggling to subsist. (Okay)

How can you expect them to receive education? (Replace can with could, as you're talking about the past, and a wish that could hardly ever come true)

After the economic reform, people are wealthier. (If you're still talking about those people in the past, you use became or were, not are. And if the people are still alive up to now, or you're talking about the present, you say: People have been/have become wealthier, because the action itself develops)

More and more people could afford the tuition. (Okay)
The number of schools was increasing rapidly. (A number of something: countable things/An amount of something: uncountable things)

Thus, people have more money and can receive education now. (Okay - I wonder if Thus is necessary here)

I hope it helps a little bit

Have a nice day!
GN

Jiangyueming · Answer

Wow, it's very kind of you to give me valuable suggestions. I appreciate it!
Have a nice day!

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