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Instructions: Organized tour to remote areas and community is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and the environment?

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Traveling becomes a crucial element for a country's development. It is difficult for a group of people who don't have any experience to travel by themselves. Therefore, organized tour to remote areas and community is necessary for both countries and tourism.

A lot of bad people cause air polluted, deforestation, over-cultivation, etc. A landscape is just beautiful when it is wild. Therefore, we should not organize tour to create a chance for people to discover new places. For example, if a wild beach becomes famous, a tourist company can damage it and build a resort to earn money. This action will delete the wild view of beach which is never recover.

In contrast, organized tour is also bring back a lot of advantages for the local people. They can get profit from tourism who pay money for travel services. Living in the higher modern standard, needs of people about traveling increases gradually. Because people also have knowledge about environment, they will not have bad actions such as throwing rubbish in wrong places, damaging forest, etc. Furthermore, they can love nature and determine protect the environment after trips.

To sum up. I believe that there are various pros and cons of organizing tour for tourism. People who love discovering something new will know the way to help local people and protect our environment.