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Nghiatran Posted 19 years ago
Grammar

Can you help me check the grammar for this paragraph? thank you so much .

There are some negative effects in using computer in our life. First of all, using computer in all of important systems, such as military system, banking, health care, so what happen if virus or hackers can attack in to those systems, and make them become unhelpful completely. That can be catastrophe for people on the world. For example, if banking systems are not working, so all of trade deals are canceled or personal information and account will be stolen by hackers or someone. Second, using computer is cause of many health problems. Example, if people work with computer for long time, their eyes, and backs will be tied and hurt.
  

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Hi Nghiatran and welcome to the forums. You seem to have some problems with plurals and articles. You need to be careful about saying something WILL happen, instead of CAN happen.

— BarbaraPA

  • Hi Nghiatran and welcome to the forums.
  • You seem to have some problems with plurals and articles.
  • You need to be careful about saying something WILL happen, instead of CAN happen.
  • There are some negative effects in using computer in our life.
  • First of all, using computer in all of important systems, such as military system, banking, health care, so what happen if virus or hackers can attack in to those systems, and make them become unhelpful completely.
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Hi Nghiatran and welcome to the forums. You seem to have some problems with plurals and articles. You need to be careful about saying something WILL happen, instead of CAN happen.

There are some negative effects in using computer in our life. First of all, using computer in all of important systems, such as military system, banking, health care, so what happen if vir
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yes , i have many grammar problems because i have learned Enghish for few months, so can i PM for you when i need your help ? i hope you will me, thank you so much
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Hi Nghiatran,

Please use the forums for grammar help, but feel free to PM me if you need any assistance from me as a moderator.
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Hi,
The first thing you need to do is to divide your writing into sentences. Start each sentence with a capital letter, and end it with a period. Try to avoid any really long sentences.
If you do that and post again, we can give you more advice. OK?

Best wishes, Clive
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