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A park has no useful purpose. What is your opinion?

The debate whether the park should be a great destination for people has sparked a controversy among social problems. While some people claim that park is not a fascinating place for others, I strongly agree that the existence of public park should be compulsory for children and adults to release stress of studying and working.

There are some certain grounds revealing the fact that national parks need developing with various purposes. Firstly, parks are considered as a home of various trees that could bring us a source of clean air. It means that the more we grow, the better atmosphere we have. As you may know, oxygen, which is produced by green trees, plays an essential part in our life. For example, a lot of people, including locals and foreigners, often frequent the park in order to soak up a new fresh air helping them to stay healthy. That could help them to be stronger and healthier after a long stressful period. Secondly, educating young generations about how to protect endangered animals is an indispensable part for authorities to remain parks in current situation. Parks act as a precursor of protecting animals by keeping them in cage for entertainment. In fact, people can enjoy some kinds of animals that are on the brink of extinction like tiger, lion, gorilla, ect. Parents who take children to the parks at weekends could give them a lot of valuable lessons about how to prevent these animals and plans from some dangers, how to maintain the biodiversity well in our life. Thanks to these moments, as the whole, not only do the children broaden their perspectives but their relationship among them also might be strengthened day after day. Finally, investing in the sculpture garden’s improvements and innovations is of paramount importance of appealing to other people around, which can foster development of country. In Vietnam, more and more foreigners frequent the Vietnamese national park such as Cuc Phuong, Cat Tien, and so on. As a result, if some great destinations left the first impression on foreigners well with people, cultures, and local foods, Vietnam would become a well-known tourist attraction reaching millions of visitors per year.

In conclusion, based on these above mentioned facts, although some people state that park is not really necessary to people’s usages, I still would confirm that the role is undeniable since park provide people a massive source of entertainment.