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The bar graph compares four different countries in terms of their goods expenditure.

Overall, with regard to photographic film, toys and CDs, Britain was the most popular consumer, followed by French, Italian and German. In addition, concerning the remaining categories, France registered the lowest figures.

Britains used more or less 170 thousand pounds to buy photographic film and toys, compared with around 160000 pounds for CDs and perfumes. Meanwhile the spending on personal stereos and tennis racquets of this nation's population was about 150 thousand pounds. French and Italians expended the same amount of money on toys at nearly 160 thousand pounds. By contrast, regarding photographic film, the former used more money to purchase than the latter.

Germans were the lowest consumers on CDs, toys and photographic film at just under 150000 pounds. Germany and Italy recorded the similar expenditure as regard to personal stereos and tennis racquets.