Can you help correct this sentence? Thank you.

Question

When I was a child, I learned that if I didn’t study hard I wouldn’t afford my own apartment in the future, because my parents had to rent the apartment since the housing price was exceeding high.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

You need to break this up into more than one sentence.

Try again?

Clive

Jiangyueming · Answer

Thank you for your kind suggestion. Here is my revision:
When I was a child, I learned that if I didn’t study hard, I wouldn’t afford my own apartment in the future. Because my parents had to rent the apartment since the housing price was exceeding high.

Dimsumexpress · Answer

Hi jiangyueming,

I think your sentences are the reflection of typical translated thought pattern based on spoken Chinese. It is understood, but not very natural.

Your used negative construction to express your ideas which has worked ok. Just so that you know, you can also express the same meaning with the positive construction:

This is my version for your reference:
When I was a child, I remember my parents had to rent a small apartment because rent was exceedingly expensive. I learned from them that I had to work hard to be successful, so that I could afford to buy my own house when I grown up.

Can you help correct this sentence? Thank you.

Top answer

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

Related Questions