Can you help correct these two sentences? Thank you!

I'll try to make it all one sentence!

The iPhone is very popular in my city; if you walk down a street, you would find that 6 out of 10 people were using an iPhone, many of whom bought one mainly to show off due to its high price.

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Aspara GusThe iPhone is very popular in my city; if you walk down a street, you would find that 6 out of 10 people were using an iPhone, many of whom bought one mainly to show off due to its high price.

I don't see the point of using a semicolon and a mixed conditional in this sentence. It also seems too long for

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RegardsI don't see the point of using a semicolon …

I kept the semicolon because the next sentence was closely related to the first, expanding on it. You could probably get away with using a colon, even.

Regards… and a mixed conditional in this sentence.

That is how the OP wrote the sentence. It's not wrong, so there's no co

Thank you!

Here is a question. Why you use "an iphone"? I mean,the subject is 6 out of 10 people, which is plural. It seemed that 6 people were sharing an iphone, not six iphones. Thank you!

jiangyuemingHere is a question. Why you use "an iphone"? I mean,the subject is 6 out of 10 people, which is plural. It seemed that 6 people were sharing an iphone, not six iphones. Thank you!

That's a good point! I've pondered this problem myself many times. I'll let someone else answer.

If I think about it, I would guess that's what I would say because each person was using an iPhone, and we're quantifying how many people were taking part in the action rather than the phones themselves. I might also say "six people were using iPhones", but in each case I would not feel the need to specify number unless Jim were/was* using two iPhones and Susie had three.

Short answer, I

jiangyueming Iphone is really very popular in my city; if you walk down a street, you would find out 6 out of 10 people are using iphone. However, they purchased it in large part for showing off money due to its high price.

The iphone is quite popular in my city; walk down any street, and you will find six out of ten people using one. People purchase them in l

enoonI refuse to write "iPhone", because English does not permit internal capitals.

It's an exception, in my opinion. Unless the name appears in the beginning of a sentence or title (or at the end), such capitalization is not wrong. It's a stylized name, such as eBay and at&t, which overrule traditional capitalization rules.

Aspara Gus enoonI refuse to write "iPhone", because English does not permit internal capitals.It's an exception, in my opinion. Unless the name appears in the beginning of a sentence or title (or at the end), such capitalization is not wrong. It's a stylized name, such as eBay and at&t, which overrule traditional capitalization rules.

Yeah, but what I'm saying