0
Jiangyueming Posted 14 years ago
Grammar

Can you help correct these sentences? Thank you!

When I was a kid, I was obsessed with computer games, but I didn't have much money to play computer games. So I told my mother that I needed RMB20 to purchase a new book. Actually I used the money to play computer games. Once my mother wanted to see the book I bought, I didn't expect her request and had to tell the truth. My mother was furious and punished me severely. Since then, I never treated my mother out of money.
  

Top answer

Hi Yue Ming, it's a good writing! I think there's nothing much to correct, just some suggestions: -When I was a kid, I was obsessed with computer games, but I didn't have much money to play computer games . (Replacing computer games with them is better, because you already wrote computer games in the previous phrase) -So I told my mother that I needed RMB20 to purchase a new book.

— Gigilian Nguyen

  • Hi Yue Ming, it's a good writing!
  • I think there's nothing much to correct, just some suggestions: -When I was a kid, I was obsessed with computer games, but I didn't have much money to play computer games .
  • (Replacing computer games with them is better, because you already wrote computer games in the previous phrase) -So I told my mother that I needed RMB20 to purchase a new book.
  • (This is good, you can also say: I needed RMB20 to buy a new book/I needed RMB20 for a new book) -Actually , I used the money to play computer games.
  • (It's fine to add a comma after actually .
Free · every Monday

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.

3 Answers
0
Hi Yue Ming, it's a good writing!
I think there's nothing much to correct, just some suggestions:

-When I was a kid, I was obsessed with computer games, but I didn't have much money to play computer games. (Replacing computer games with
0
0
Thank you so much.
"I have never treated my mother out of money"
Sorry, here I made a mistake. It should be "I have never cheated my mother out of money"
0
0
Oh, I see. So that's the point Emotion: smile Would you like to addagain here? I have never cheated
0

Related Questions