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Viiet Posted 9 years ago
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Topic: In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university.Discuss the advangtages and disavangtages of those school leavers decision.Give your opinion.

After graduating from high school,some students choose to have a gap year to get a job or go to travel instead of becoming freshman in the university.While I accept that it has drawbacks,I would agrued that it is better than if we will take a gap year.

To opion to get a job or travel straight after school has some advantages to some exents.The main short-coming is that a number of that students may start they professional career later than their fellows who do not choose to get a job or travel.As a result, you may later in your promoter.In addition,travel costs a great deal for student geniors,when they have recently graduated so they not enough money,they have to ask to their parents for fanicial help.Therefore, there are not advisable to take this opion.

On the other hand,It seem to me that senior students should choose to have a gap year because it bring for them undenied advangages.Fristly,working or traveling are both a good change to gain some valuable expriences.My sister,in instance,also took a year out in spending time to manage a small shop.It make she more independent which absolutely useful for her career path in the future.Seconly,they can do various jobs without long-term committed so taking a gap year help young graduates determine clearly their target in the future.

In conclusion,I believe that students who have recently graduated should take a gap year to travel or get jobs before becoming university life although this decision has some undenied disadvantage but this is a precious opportunities for a change.

  

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Give your opinion. While I accept that it has drawbacks,I would agrued that it is better than if we will take a gap year. Therefore, there are not advisable to take this opion.

— Viiet

  • Give your opinion.
  • While I accept that it has drawbacks,I would agrued that it is better than if we will take a gap year.
  • Therefore, there are not advisable to take this opion.
  • Seconly,they can do various jobs without long-term committed so taking a gap year help young graduates determine clearly their target in the future.
  • In conclusion,I believe that students who have recently graduated should take a gap year to travel or get jobs before becoming university life although this decision has some undenied disadvantage but this is a precious opportunities for a change.
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Topic: In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university.Discuss the advangtages and disavangtages of those school leavers decision.Give your opinion.

After graduating from high school,some students choose to have a gap year to get a job or go to travel instead of becoming freshman in the university.While I accept t

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Viiet;

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