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Julie_loc Posted 15 years ago
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The Boy in the striped pajamas is a touching story about a nine year old boy named Bruno who moves to a desolated area in Auschwitz with his family where he finds nothing to do and no one to play with.
He has no idea what is going on and one day he goes in the woods a sees a barbed wire and everything. There was a boy in the striped pajamas and bald sitting on the other side of the fence. The Boy was a Jew and his named Shmuel.Bruno ignores his mother's repeated instructions not to explore the back garden and heads for the farm he has seen in the near distance. There he meets Shmuel, a boy his own age who lives a parallel, alien existence on the other side of a barbed wire fence. Bruno's encounter with the boy in the striped pajamas leads him from innocence to a dawning awareness of the adult world around them as his meetings with Shmuel develop into a friendship with devastating consequence
He has no idea what is going on and one day he goes in the woods a sees a barbed wire and everything. There was a boy in the striped pajamas and bald sitting on the other side of the fence. The Boy was a Jew and his named Shmuel.Bruno ignores his mother's repeated instructions not to explore the back garden and heads for the farm he has seen in the near distance. There he meets Shmuel, a boy his own age who lives a parallel, alien existence on the other side of a barbed wire fence. Bruno's encounter with the boy in the striped pajamas leads him from innocence to a dawning awareness of the adult world around them as his meetings with Shmuel develop into a friendship with devastating consequence
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Hello, Julie. I have underlined some problem areas and struck out useless verbiage. If you post you revised version here, we will check it again.
- Hello, Julie.
- I have underlined some problem areas and struck out useless verbiage.
- If you post you revised version here, we will check it again.
- The Boy in the striped pajamas is a touching story about a nine year old boy named Bru no w ho moves to a desolated area in Auschwitz with his fam ily whe re he finds nothing to do and no one to play with.
- He has no idea what is going on and one day he goes in the woods a sees a barbed wire and everything .
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Hello, Julie. I have underlined some problem areas and struck out useless verbiage. If you post you revised version here, we will check it again.
The Boy in the striped pajamas is a touching story about a nine year old boy named Bruno who moves to a desolated area in Auschwitz with his family where he finds nothing to do and no one to play with. He has
The Boy in the striped pajamas is a touching story about a nine year old boy named Bruno who moves to a desolated area in Auschwitz with his family where he finds nothing to do and no one to play with. He has
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