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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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can you correct this paragraph, please
The story revolves in a village named Viscos, the old woman Berta saw with coincidence when she sat as every day outside her front door, a devil came to Viscos and maybe he will destroy it.
She was too old to help herself or her village and she knew that no one would believe her.
She was too old to help herself or her village and she knew that no one would believe her.
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" Second, do not run all the sentences together. Here is one way to put this together: The story takes place a village named Viscos. An old woman, Bertha, happened to see a devil as she sat outside her front door, which she did every day.
- " Second, do not run all the sentences together.
- Here is one way to put this together: The story takes place a village named Viscos.
- An old woman, Bertha, happened to see a devil as she sat outside her front door, which she did every day.
- Perhaps the devil will destroy her village.
- She was too old to save herself or her village from the devil and she knew that no one would believe her.
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Okay, here are my suggestions
First, not "revolve." Second, do not run all the sentences together. Here is one way to put this together:
The story takes place a village named Viscos. An old woman, Bertha, happened to see a devil as she sat outside her front door, which she did every day. Perhaps the devil will destroy her village. She was too old to save herself or her village fro
First, not "revolve." Second, do not run all the sentences together. Here is one way to put this together:
The story takes place a village named Viscos. An old woman, Bertha, happened to see a devil as she sat outside her front door, which she did every day. Perhaps the devil will destroy her village. She was too old to save herself or her village fro
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