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Marranit Posted 18 years ago
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Everything began a day when I wake up and realized that I wanted to do this, but everything turns around the things was not so easy like a thought.

Good morning darling wake up don’t be lazy today is your big day, I wake up and I started to think that today is my big day. To day is the day the possibility to work at one of the biggest detective agency in New York. Ever since I was a boy a have always dreamt to work in a detective agency I always played and saw detective’s series.

I ate my breakfast and read the newspaper like always I kissed my wife and drove to the detective agency there I saw a man who seems nice. He was happy and he smile all the and l he came I started to talk whit me. I cruses my arms and started pray I was very nervous that moment.

Hello my name is Ryan Robinson and I man the chef, you must be peter

Yes it is right I am Peter McClain nice to meet you

Nice to meet you too .Peter sits down please

I sat and he started to explain everything who they work and we asked me what was my expectations or if a have work before. That moment I was very nervous after but Ryan was a kind man and he understood after we talk he say ‘Peter welcome to you new job I now that you are a very responsible man and you are not going to disappoint me but I must to warn you, in the beginning some cases are very hard and you must to be strong and remember why you are here. It is my advice and I hope you take this

I was so happy that I only answer yes sir I well not disappoint you and that moment someone call. It was a woman who needs help. I heard Mr. Robinson said yes I talk whit one of my guys and he well contact you after. And then he says

Peter it seems that you have a crime to resolve but first you must to call this woman

I was so happy everything seems so easy I get a job who in the beginnings thought it was impossible to get and I have a crime to resolve is perfect almost perfect..

I call this woman his name is Susan in the beginning she cries but in the same moment she was happy because I wanted to take this case but I was confuse because everything was so strange I decided to meet here after lunch and after I meet my wife I told here everything she was happy for me she was proud like always my wife is always there when I need her.

I remember the first time I meet her it was in waynes coffee I draw the coffee in her closes I was very sad my dad passed away the same day anyway I remember when a draw the coffee she smile and she said don’t worry its fine and she asked me if I feel good because I saw very sad I tell here and everything started there..

I waited Susan I saw here coming she was very sad I could see the desperation and who sad she was in her eyes I felt very bad.

-Hello I am Peter McCabe you must be Susan

Yes peter I am Susan nice to meet you

-How can I help you?

Well my situation I very difficult my daughter was killed and the police think that my son killed my daughter.

What? Why?

The police say that they found evidence in his room. They found a knife and blood .

How old are you son and daughter?

He is 11 years old.

Did you hear or saw something?

Yes I heard something but I thought that it was a dog or cat.

Did someone saw or heard something strange that night?

No, no one, please I am confused and desperate you must to help me

Yes off curse I want to help you but I must to talk whit the police first I call you when I heard something

In my head I Could image a child kill her own sister it most to be something wrong the Next day I meet Mr. wrong the man how is in charge I talked whit him and asked me who I was I present me and after I asked he all the information we was a very annoy man he said I believe that you can help this boy because he has confessed that he is the murder.

what had the boy confessed no it most to be some error I talk whit the boys mom and she never mention that the boy had confessed

I don’t now the only thing that I now is that the boy had confessed and now we are wainted to what the had to say I sorry
  
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