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Freedom of religion, as long as it does not encroach upon a right or more of a member of society, should be guaranteed by the state, and policies must be established in order to not cause undue hardship to those who intend practicing their cults as part of their legitimate right in society. Any such policies, far from being bad, as argued by some, actually promote diversity and tolerance, at least in theory, and ease the integration of those who come settle permanently in the country. The consequences of which are that any country that is multicultural, insures a proper environment for diversity to thrive and makes itself more attractive as a host country to foreigners. However, if a practice infringes someone's right, such practice must be condemned and punished accordingly. For instance, a religious practice should not cause any physical or moral harm to any individual even with his consent, nor does it gives the right to transgress any law, unless prerogative is given, as every member of society has to stay within the law. Policy-makers should prescribe institutional instructions as to how to evaluate a demand of special treatment pertaining to religion and the practices thereof. Prerogatives should not be rejected, in the contrary, it should be evaluated as a serious and legitimate demand, as religion is not mere devotion, but it also encompasses an aspect of religious faith. Implicitly, before and in the run up to the grant, the clauses of the grant should be reminded to the requesting party and may be revised if need be.