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The line graph compares the proportion of four different age groups of cinema-goers in Great Britain over a period of 16 years ( 1984-2000).
Overall, while people aged 15-24 accounted for the greatest percentage of cinema visitors throughout the period shown, a reserve pattern can be seen to the proportion of those aged 35 and over.
In 1984, the percentage of people between 15 and 24 was highest, at more than 15%, followed by the figure for 7-14 and 25-35 age groups, took up 10% and 5% respectively. By contrast, the percentage of people who went cinema over 35 years old was negligible.
From 1989 to 2000, the proportion of cinema visitors from the youngest group increased dramatically and reached a peak of 38% in 1999, then this number experienced a slight fall of 5% by 2000. The three remaining figure including 15-24,25-35, over 35 age groups continued to rise to 60%, 22% and 15% in that order at the end of the period. ( 169 words )

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The line graph compares the proportion of people who attended the cinema monthly in four different age groups ~~of cinema-goers~~ in Great Britain over a period of 16 years ( 1984-2000). (incomplete. What are the age groups?)

Describe the graph in all aspects. If you name the age groups, you can refer to them by name in the body paragraphs.

The line graph compares the percentage of British people who attended the cinema monthly by age group from 1984 to 2000. Four age groups are shown: children aged 7-14, adolescents (15-24), young adults (25-35) and older adults (over 35).

Overall, while people aged 15-24 accounted for the greatest percentage of cinema visitors (incorrect expression, This means of the audiences in the cinema, the largest group were in the 15-24 age range. That is not what the graph shows.) throughout the period shown, a reserve pattern (wrong expression) can be seen to the proportion of those aged 35 and over.
In 1984, the percentage of people between 15 and 24 was highest, at more than 15%, followed by the figure (wrong word) for 7-14 and 25-35 age groups, took up 10% and 5% respectively. By contrast, the percentage of people who went (missing words) cinema over 35 years old (Incorrect expression. This means that the cinema was built more than 35 years ago) was negligible.
From 1989 to 2000, the proportion of cinema visitors from the youngest group increased dramatically and reached a peak of 38% in 1999, (comma splice error) then this number experienced (wrong verb. Numbers do not have experiences. Only people and animals have experiences.) a slight fall of 5% by 2000. The three remaining figure (wrong word) including 15-24,25-35, over 35 age groups continued to rise to 60%, 22% and 15% in that order at the end of the period.

Example essay: This essay is too long to be a model, but you can study the vocabulary, phrases and sentences as examples of describing a line graph and its curves.

The line graph compares the percentage of British people who attended the cinema monthly by age group from 1984 to 2000. Four age groups are shown: children aged 7-14, adolescents (15-24), young adults (25-35) and older adults (over 35).

Overall, more people in each group enjoyed a cinema monthly in 2000 compared to 1984. The difference was the highest for the adolescents; with a proportion that was three times larger in 2000 than 1984. This group had a larger percentage than any of the other groups in every year.

Monthly cinema attendance in 1984 had relatively modest percentages in all of the groups. It was only 18% for the adolescents, followed by one in ten for the children, and less than one in twenty for the two older groups. In 2000, there were equal proportions of adolescents and young adults at about one-third, or a little less than half of the adolescents, at 58%. The curves mostly rose continuously; exceptions were a plateau in the young adult group at about a quarter (25%) between 1994 and 1999, and a peak at 1999 in the children's group at 38% in that same year. People in the older adult group attended cinema the least, with practically none in 1984 to about one in seven (14%) in 2000. The rate of increase in this group picked up after 1989; the curve was essentially flat in the first five years of the period and trending upward at a little over 1% per year after that.

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