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Two pictures illustrate the changes of the way get to a city hospital in two different years.
In 2007, the city hospital had one park for both staff and public. It was in the south of the hospital and among the Hospital Road, the Ring Road and the City Road. In 2010, the parking has been expanded and divided into two particular areas: one for public and one for hospital's employees. Public parking has been built eastwards the hospital while private car park has occupied in the place of the former parking.
One of the changes in the structure of the route is about bus stops. There were six waiting-for- bus spots along the Hospital Road in 2007 and all of them have been exchanged for a new bus station three years later. Other change is the appearance of two roundabout. The first around-turn is at the intersection of the City Road and the Hospital Road. The second one is between the Ring road and the Hospital road. Both are connected to the bus station.
Overall, there are three new features between 2007 and 2010: a new bus station, two new traffic circle, and two car parks. One feature remains is the city hospital.
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0In 2007, the city hospital had one park for both staff and public.
A park is a place for people to sit on the grass, play with their children, go for a stroll.
A parking lot is a place where people can park their cars.
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