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I'm on winter break now and graduate this Feb. My dream is to travel all over the world. I believe that it will give me a lot of chance to experience and see. I'd like to listen to people's story from all over the world. Absolutely writing post cards like this is kind of as well. I also like to pick up different languages. It makes me so excited to have languages to learn in the future.  Take care!

Doctor D · Accepted Answer

Trying to keep to your words, this is how I would say it:

I'm on winter break now and will graduate this Feb(ruary). My dream is to travel all over the world. I believe that it will give me a lot of chances to experience and see [what? new things?]. I'd like to listen to people's stories from all over the world. Absolutely I will be writing post cards like this i~~s kind of~~ as well. I also like to pick up different languages. It makes me so excited to have languages to learn in the future. Take care!

This sentence is unclear as written: Absolutely writing post cards like this is kind of as well.
Perhaps you mean something like: Writing post cards like this is absolutely enjoyable as well.

This sentence seems incomplete: It makes me so excited to have languages to learn in the future.
It sounds like you are excited by the fact that there are more languages that you can learn. But perhaps you mean to say: I am also looking forward with excitement to learning new languages. OR: Also, I am eager to learn new languages.

I hope this helps.

Domdom · Answer

Thank you for your replay in detail!

1. I believe that it will give me a lot of chances to experience and see [what? new things?].
? Yes, I had to add that. But sometimes isn't it okay without the object in this sentence? I often see sentences without objects like in a movie's subtitle.

2. Absolutely writing post cards like this is kind of as well.
? I posted another question here for this sentence and receive its answer. I rewrote it 'I think receiving postcards is a way of listening to people's stories'. It is corrected. Could you give me another way to say it if you could?

3. It makes me so excited to have languages to learn in the future.
? Your correction is perfectly what I was trying to say! Thank you. And how about 'It makes me so excited to be able to learn new languages in the future' or It makes me so excited to learn new languages in the future'?

Doctor D · Answer

1. As you use them, the verbs "experience" and "see" need objects. You experience something and you see something. So you need to say what that something is.

2. The corrected version is good. You could also say: Receiving post cards is another way to hear stories from around the world.

3. You don't need to say "in the future" because you are talking about an action that must take place in the future (not now). However, if you want to keep your "in the future" wording, I would re-arrange the sentence:
I am so excited to know that in the future I will still find new languages to learn.
Or, In the future, I know I will find new languages to learn and this excites me.

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