Can you check my text? Help with university application

Hello everyone!

Now I`m working on my application for one of UK universities. One component of application - essay about why I want to study there etc.

The essay is really big and, honestly, I do not want to publish it openly cause it has some personal details etc.

I`d be really happy if someone ready to check my essay and give his personal opinion about is it good or bad - I will send it to personal e-mail of such a person.

Many thanks in advance!