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The table compares expenditures of five Western nations (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey) on goods and services (food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education) in 2002.         Overall, people spent the most money on food, drinks, and tobacco, while spending on leisure and education was the lowest.          Regarding food/ drinks/ tobacco, Turkey led with 32.14%. It was followed by Ireland (28.91%), Spain (18.80%), and Italy (16.36%). Sweden had the lowest budget for this category, about half of Ireland, at 15.77%. Turning to leisure and education, the leader was still Turkey at 4.35%, nearly fourfold as much as Spain (1.98%). Expenditures on leisure and education in Sweden, Italy, Ireland were 3.22%, 3.20%, and 2.21% respectively. The last category is clothing and footwear. The amount of money Italian spent on clothes was the highest, 9.0%, while Ireland, Spain, and Turkey were relatively similar, at around 6.5%. Sweden was the country spending the least on clothing and footwear, 5.4%.

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The table compares expenditures of five Western nations (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey) on goods and services (food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education) in 2002.

Overall, people spent the most money on food, drinks, and tobacco, while spending on leisure and education was the lowest.

Regarding food/ drinks/ tobacco, Turkey led with 32.14%. It was followed by Ireland (28.91%), Spain (18.80%), and Italy (16.36%). Sweden had the lowest budget for this category, about half of Ireland, at 15.77%. Turning to leisure and education, the leader was still Turkey at 4.35%, nearly fourfold as much as Spain (1.98%). Expenditures on leisure and education in Sweden, Italy, Ireland were 3.22%, 3.20%, and 2.21% respectively. The last category is clothing and footwear. The amount of money Italian spent on clothes was the highest, 9.0%, while Ireland, Spain, and Turkey were relatively similar, at around 6.5%. Sweden was the country spending the least on clothing and footwear, 5.4%.

Dirak · Answer

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table compares expenditures of five Western nations (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey) on goods and services (food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education) in 2002.

Overall, people spent the most money on food, drinks, and tobacco, while spending on leisure and education was the lowest.

Regarding food/ drinks/ tobacco, Turkey led with 32.14%. It was followed by Ireland (28.91%), Spain (18.80%), and Italy (16.36%). Sweden had the lowest budget for this category, about half of Ireland, at 15.77%. Turning to leisure and education, the leader was still Turkey at 4.35%, nearly fourfold as much as Spain (1.98%). Expenditures on leisure and education in Sweden, Italy, Ireland were 3.22%, 3.20%, and 2.21% respectively. The last category is clothing and footwear. The amount of money Italian spent on clothes was the highest, 9.0%, while Ireland, Spain, and Turkey were relatively similar, at around 6.5%. Sweden was the country spending the least on clothing and footwear, 5.4%.

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AlpheccaStars · Answer

The table compares expenditures, as a percent of total spending, of five Western nations (Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey) on goods and services (food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education) in 2002. (Expenditures need to be qualified, otherwise it would be an amount in dollars or other currency.)

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Overall, people in all five nations spent the most money on food, drinks, and tobacco, while spending on leisure and education was the lowest.

Regarding food/ drinks/ tobacco, Turkey led with 32.14%. It was followed by Ireland (28.91%), Spain (18.80%), and Italy (16.36%). Sweden had the lowest budget for this category, 15.77%,about half that of Ireland, ~~half of Ireland~~, at 15.77%. ~~Turning to~~ In leisure and education, the leader was still Turkey at 4.35%, nearly ~~fourfold~~ four times as much as Spain (1.98%). ~~Expenditures on leisure and education~~ in Sweden, Italy, Ireland, they were 3.22%, 3.20%, and 2.21% respectively. The last category is clothing and footwear. The ~~amount of money~~ (These are not comparing amounts, but percentages.) Italians allocated the most, ~~spent on clothes was the highest~~, 9.0%, to this category, while Ireland, Spain, and Turkey were relatively similar, at around 6.5%. Sweden was the country with the lowest percentage, ~~spending the least on clothing and footwear,~~ 5.4%.

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Comments on this task.

Useful words:
Nationalities:

Turks - people of Turkey (Turkish people)
the Irish - people of Ireland
Spaniards - people of Spain (also the Spanish)
Swedes - people of Sweden
Italians - people of Italy

outlier - a data value that is significantly different than the others. It stands out.

range (verb, also a noun): the span of the extreme values for one measure.

fraction - a division used to make a descriptive comparison between two values. e.g. A = 100 and B = 18. B is a small fraction of A.

Essay for study purposes. This essay is longer than ideal, but gives some example of vocabulary words.

My essay plan:

Paragraph 1: Describe the table and the column headings.
Paragraph 2: Write 2 or 3 main observations. (highest and lowest category, by average amounts, compare Turkey with Sweden.
Paragraph 3: Write some interesting details. (Include specific numbers from the table.)

Look for opportunities to combine categories together for comparisons. In this table, you can add up the budgets for each of the countries. It is OK to round off the numbers for comparisons.

For example, the Turkish people allocated a total of 32+7+4 percentage to these three categories. That is 43%, which is much larger than the Swedes (16+5+3 = 24%).

You can also calculate the averages per category. For example, in the food category, (29 +16 + 19 +16 + 32) / 5 = (rounded) 23%.

The table compares the percentages of total spending that people in five different countries allocated to three budget categories (food/drink/tobacco, clothing/footwear and leisure/education) in the year 2002. The countries listed are Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey.

Overall, these three categories added up to less than half of the consumers' total budget. Spending was consistently highest in the category "food, drink and tobacco," and lowest for "leisure and education". Turkish people spent a greater percentage of their total spending on these three categories compared to the other four countries, while Swedes spent the least.

While Turkish people spent the most for food, drink and tobacco, 32.14%, the Irish came in second at 28.91%. The percentages for Italy, Spain, and Sweden were 16.36%, 18.8%, and 15.77% respectively, averaging 23%. Spending on the other two categories was a much smaller fraction. Leisure / education was consistently under 5%, with Turkey having the highest value at 4.35%. And that was slightly lower than clothing and footwear, which ranged from 5.40 to 6.63% in all countries with the exception of Italy, an outlier at 9%.

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