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Dni483 Posted 12 years ago
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Can you check for any mistakes?

Would it be wrong if I say

I have tried to photograph the tension in her by going to the park, as the park was a new place for her. There were people walking around in the park who were looking at her and that made her feel unstable and unconfident. I tried to bring the intemacy in my subect.

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I tried to photograph the tension in her by taking her to the park, as the park was a new place for her. Some people walking around in the park were looking at her and that made her feel uncomfortable and unconfident. I tried to bring intimacy to my subject.

— Mister Micawber

  • I tried to photograph the tension in her by taking her to the park, as the park was a new place for her.
  • Some people walking around in the park were looking at her and that made her feel uncomfortable and unconfident.
  • I tried to bring intimacy to my subject.
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I tried to photograph the tension in her by taking her to the park, as the park was a new place for her. Some people walking around in the park were looking at her and that made her feel uncomfortable and unconfident. I tried to bring intimacy to my subject.
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Why can't I use present perfect? I have tried?
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You can if you must, as a life experience, but the rest of the text indicates a specific past time.
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Which one indicates, the past time?

thanks
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This part:

...taking her to the park, as the park was a new place for her. Some people walking around in the park were looking at her and that made her feel uncomfortable and unconfident.
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I still don't understand why those words don't let the use of present perfect.
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They are all in the simple or continuous past and indicate a finished past time.
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