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University is the place where we learn the most of the things in our lives and which decide out future. Some people may attend college to get new experience and to make the career but I would attend college to increase my knowledge because it helps me to make my career bright. Also, it helps me to save money in future. I will give two examples to support my claim.

First, knowledge has an integral role in order to make a bright career. Nowadays, most of the company require those employees who keep learning new things those are only possible if they have attended college to get knowledge. For instance, I can recall one newspaper article which I was reading last week. It was about the life of Steve Jobs. It was stated in that article that he attended his university only to get knowledge and he kept the same strategy during his first job which helps his to get a higher position in that company. Furthermore, I must say that his learning attitude helps his to become a founder of world larger company Apple Ltd. I would say that Steve Job did not be able to get such high success if he attended college only to get the new experience .This example taught me that there is the only way to success in a corporate world that is to get maximum knowledge from our college study.

In addition to making bright career, it also helps me to save money. I must say presently the children education is getting costly and it is nearly impossible for a poor family to pay tuition fees for extra classes. Therefore, if people attended college to get knowledge then it is easily for them to teach their children at home. There is no doubt that parents can not teach all subjects at home but they can resolve the study related problems at home. For instance, the example of my uncle Frank is a good example of what I mean. He was so smart study and took maximum knowledge from his university study,therefore he takes the extra classes of his two sons at home. On the other hand, my friend Joseph has one son, he is taking extra classes for three hours a week and he is paying hundred dollars every week. Therefore, we can clearly see from above example that if we attend college to get knowledge then that knowledge helps us to teach our children and that is how we can save money.

In conclusion, I believe that we should have learning attitude during our college years so that we can acquire more knowledge and that can help us to make our bright career and save money by resolving our study related problems at home.