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Creativeguru Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

can we edit these paragraphs?

1. for window phones:

It’s the only phone with Live Tiles that bring information and updates right to the surface, so you stay closer to the people and things that matter.

2. for pc window:

Surface with Windows 8 Pro is all new, and yet you can do everything you’ve ever done on your PC. Touch-enhanced applications run as smoothly as your favourite desktop software, so you can work the way you want.

3.for games:

It’s got game. And a whole lot more.

Please help me with the best alternate edited version of the above

Thanks in advance
  

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Surface with Windows 8 Pro is all new, and yet you can only do those things you’ve always done on your PC. Touch-enhanced applications run just as smoothly as your favourite desktop software, but you're probably resigned to that by now. Seriously, Creativeguru, you wouldn't be using this site for a little free market research, would you?

— Deadrat

  • Surface with Windows 8 Pro is all new, and yet you can only do those things you’ve always done on your PC.
  • Touch-enhanced applications run just as smoothly as your favourite desktop software, but you're probably resigned to that by now.
  • Seriously, Creativeguru, you wouldn't be using this site for a little free market research, would you?
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Surface with Windows 8 Pro is all new, and yet you can only do those things you’ve always done on your PC. Touch-enhanced applications run just as smoothly as your favourite desktop software, but you're probably resigned to that by now.

Seriously, Creativeguru, you wouldn't be using this site for a little free market research, would you?
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No not at all..this is an assignment..I am doing PG in advertising...so we need to write edited version as many options as we can. But some how I was stuck with it hence I tried to post here...to at least get a start
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Sorry to be so suspicious.

So, ....

How did you like my copy?
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It is excellent gave me a kick..in sometimes I will post my versions. But in a meantime if you could help me with others too

Thanks a lot
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I hope you enjoyed it, but since humor doesn't translate easily across cultures, I feel bound to check: you did realize that it was a slightly sardonic joke, right? Don't turn in my efforts. Your professors will not be best pleased.
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My take:Presenting all new Windows 8 Pro platform, and yet you can do all those things you’ve always loved on your PC. Its upgraded Touch-enhanced applications run just as smoothly as your favourite desktop software.
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I'm going to try once more, Creativeguru, and then I will consider that I've discharged my responsibility.

What I originally posted was a sardonic joke. I hope you enjoyed it. At the least, I hope you didn't take it seriously. And I would feel bad if you did and incorporated any of it into a class assignment.
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No I haven't Emotion: smile

But I would appreciate if you give me more options for this and other points too
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