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This project ‘Community Service Program’ is encouraged before in the UAE, particulay in the ministry of Education, but we want to enhance this idea by applying voluntary program in public schools. This project will help me as a future school scoial worker to see generation awared, educated and well behaved because voluntary work teaches volunteer more than takes student’s time. Community Service Program helps teachers to have students with resposibility, experience and knowledge about works and community. The UAE encourages volunteers, espcially students and it establishes many organizations that support any volnuteer work such as Takatof and Injaaz. H.H Sheikh Mohammed Bin Zayed Al Nahyan says that “Our country deserves the best that we can give it giving back to society is something that brings out the best in every one of us” (Takatof, 2009). Our leaders support any voluntary work, they support any projects that encourage people to volunteer, and shows voluntary work benefits to other gulf countries. UAE and gulf countries are one country that they help each other and provide assistants by volunteers. In addition, poor countries need more volunteers from developed countries like UAE to support people by distributing of essential needs.

IB program is ‘designed as an academically challenging and balanced program of education with final examinations that prepares students, normally aged 16 to 19, for success at university and life beyond” (International Baccalaureate Organization, 2005). This program is an exellecnt and successful in producing challenged and talent studnets. So, it important to apply IB program in high schools, particullary in public schools where we are going to target. It is about currcilums that students must choose one from each groups 1 to 5, thus ensuring breadth of exeprince in language, social studies, the experimental sciences and mathematics. Many countries concern IB Program such as China. “There are 55 IB World Schools in China offering one or more of the three IB programmes”. Starting from small numbers of concerning IB programmes increase in most countries, espcially developded countries like UAE which “There are 20 IB World Schools in United Arab Emirates offering one or more of the three IB programmes” (International Baccalaureate Organization, 2005). All of these schools are private schools which follow American and Australian protocol. For that reason, we target public school to integrate IB program with curriculim.

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- - I have underlined grammar & spelling mistakes: This proj ect ‘Co mmunity Service Program’ is encouraged before in the UAE, particulay in the ministry of Education, but we want to enhance this idea by applying voluntary program in public schools. This project will help me as a future school scoial worker to see generation awared , educated and well behaved because voluntary work teaches volunteer more than takes student’s time. Community Service Program helps teachers to have students with resposibility, experience and knowledge about works and community.

  • - - I have underlined grammar & spelling mistakes: This proj ect ‘Co mmunity Service Program’ is encouraged before in the UAE, particulay in the ministry of Education, but we want to enhance this idea by applying voluntary program in public schools.
  • This project will help me as a future school scoial worker to see generation awared , educated and well behaved because voluntary work teaches volunteer more than takes student’s time.
  • Community Service Program helps teachers to have students with resposibility, experience and knowledge about works and community.
  • The UAE encourages volunteers, espcially stude nts a nd it establishes many organizations that support any volnuteer work such as Takatof and Injaaz.
  • H Sheikh Mohammed Bin Zayed Al Nahyan says that “ Our country deserves the best that we can giv e it givi ng back to society is something that brings out the best in every one of us ” (Takatof, 2009).
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I need only show me where grammar mistakes.-- I have underlined grammar & spelling mistakes:

This project ‘Community Service Program’ is encouraged before in the UAE, particulay in the ministry of Education, but we want to enhance this idea by applying voluntary program in public schools. This project will help me as a future school scoi

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