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this my simple essay about "TECHNOLOGY"

Technology plays an important role in our life,it dominates our movement our decision and, controls our physical and psychological health. it has a positive face and as well the negative one . we are in the most powerful era in history , technology helps us to invented medicine, determine what sex of unborn baby inside mother’s womb, it helps students for their researches it help them to find the easiest way to reach to the piece of information . it changes the whole world makes it easier and quicker and more brilliant.
can you imagine our life today without technology ! we will lose
we are used to using technology every day every hour . and this the horrible face of technology . A small kid can not leave his iPad . parents leave him with his device ,so what about his eyes ! his brain , And the most horrible is that parents actually knew about all these facts but seem like ignore them . Twitter , Facebook,Instagram , and other applications that are shaped our life , it has a great influence on kids , teens , adult . we can not ignore these facts and go on , we need to handle it . if parents appreciate the responsibility and respect these facts and, take it seriously we can life safely.