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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Can u check this for me

Anotehr attraction i loved was the colosseum .When we were in line to get in,this fake Roman soldier comes up to me; and he wants me to pay him to get in a picture because the make money by geting in pictures with tourists its kind of crazy. the colosseum was really old . i enjoyed hearing the ;history of all the events that took placed there it was really interesting
  

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It would probably be okay in conversation, or in a chat room. You need to capitalize the personal pronoun "I," and you need to make it clear where one sentence stops and the next one starts. The shift from past tense to present tense is quite casual (this guy comes up to me), and would probably be unacceptable in a formal piece.

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  • It would probably be okay in conversation, or in a chat room.
  • You need to capitalize the personal pronoun "I," and you need to make it clear where one sentence stops and the next one starts.
  • The shift from past tense to present tense is quite casual (this guy comes up to me), and would probably be unacceptable in a formal piece.
  • Another attraction I loved was the C olosseum.
  • When we were in line to get in, this fake Roman soldier comes up to me; and he wants me to pay him to pose for a picture with us.
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It would probably be okay in conversation, or in a chat room.

You need to capitalize the personal pronoun "I," and you need to make it clear where one sentence stops and the next one starts.
The shift from past tense to present tense is quite casual (this guy comes up to me), and would probably be unacceptable in a formal piece.

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