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JJDouglas Posted 10 years ago
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Can this sentence be rewritten so that it's simpler and less wordy?

Is the following sentence too long and confusing? Are there any suggestions as to how I could recast it to make it read better?

"After realising that people who played a lot of video games did better at the driving simulator test than those who didn't, the researchers decided to put a study together to see how much of a factor gaming really is in improving driving skill."
  

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After realising that people who play video games do better on the driving simulator test, t he researchers decided to see how much gaming really improves driving skill.

  • After realising that people who play video games do better on the driving simulator test, t he researchers decided to see how much gaming really improves driving skill.
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After realising that people who play video games do better on the driving simulator test, the researchers decided to see how much gaming really improves driving skill.

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