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Guest Posted 21 years ago

Can this be considered a poem?

Does it need to have some sort of predefined structure? Just some thoughts I scribbled down. For some reason I cannot get myself to give it a title...it just doesn't feel right. All comments will be appreciated.

The feeling of hopelessness consumes me
Tomorrow is a new day, I'll start fresh
but tomorrow never comes
I lack little, why do I feel so empty?
I have the key, but my hand refuses to unlock my cage
Not worthy of the love I have,
or the life
I'm a leech on society's back.
I despise myself.
  

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Its a good one... but a sad one.
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Thank you kobi and anita. Yes, it is very sad. Somehow I feel more inclined to write down my feelings when they are negative. I would like to try and write when I feel happy though. Will post if I do. Thanks again guys
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Unfortunately another sad one:

Took a test the other day
Said I've got more love to give than most
Maybe that's the answer to my questions
Perhaps I expect too much of you
****, beautiful...it's not enough in my eyes
I want you to tell me I'm kind
I want you to tell me I'm sweet
I want you to tell me I'm loving, giving and nurturing
Or is "I love
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Can a stick man picture be considered art?

Of course you can call it art, but compare it to the Rembrants and Van Goghs of the world it becomes nothing more than a sketch.


HePo
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Hi Hepo. Thanks for your feedback. I understand what you're saying. I didn't pay much attention to being artistic, I just sort of summarised my feelings. I don't think that big words and lots of symbolism and imagery are what make a poem more artistic though. The poems that have touched me in my life are the ones that I can relate to on a certain level, the ones that are hearfelt, you know?
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I agree with you. Poems are like everything else in life. I always relate to the things which are hearfelt.
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There is a world of difference between following your heart and allowing it to rule you. In the above case, your poem is commmanded by the latter.

HePo
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Maybe hepo hasn't come across all kinds of poets and poetry. check out e.e.cummings and u'll see what I mean
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