Can someone read over/edit my body paragraph?

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Gatsby’s realization of his dreams’ futility leads to his death. During Tom’s confrontation about his affair with Daisy, Gatsby tells him, "she doesn’t love you . . . she loves me"(137). Daisy does not speak for herself suggesting she has no intentions to break her marriage with Tom. Gatsby tells her to end her relationship with him, but "she hesitated"(139), and tells him, "‘I can’t help what’s past . . . I did love him once – but I loved you too’"(140). Her reaction "seemed to bite physically into Gatsby"(140) as he responds, "you loved me too?"(140). Because she still loves Tom, it destroys his dreams. When he returns home, he feels the loss of "the old warm world, paid a high price for living too long with a single dream"(169). His life becomes meaningless by chasing a girl who does not love him. He recognizes Daisy’s superficiality acknowledging, "what a grotesque thing a rose is"(169). When Wilson arrives to kill him, he does not defend himself. He prefers dying rather than living without his dreams.