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Bonnie's mother never contributed to the Social Security program, according to the United States government. The Social Security program provides survivors benefits based on the contributions an individual makes during his or her lifetime into Social Security. The Social Security Act was passed in 1935, Bonnie’s mother Martha Smith last worked in 1920 and decided to marry in 1921and had not continued a tax earning job since. Her husband Ben Smith was the only one paying taxes from his work earnings. Given that Martha Smith was a homemaker and not a wage earner the survivors are not eligible for social security death benefits. Bonnie’s mother is only eligible for benefits through the earnings of her husband which she received when he died.

Bonnie attempts to convince readers her mother worked, which entitles her to a Social Security death benefit. Bonnie constantly finds a way to throw in a hardship that is happening at the time followed by a very detailed work regiment her mother had to do during the difficulties. She goes into very little detail of her father with the work and the car accident but goes into great detail about her mother. The author reflects on her mother’s car accident which left her paralyzed, and explains how she continues to do the same work as before despite of being in a wheelchair. She gains empathy throughout the essay for her mother by repeating the numerous jobs she had to do, She does this because she is disappointed to hear that her mother never worked by the person on the phone.

Bonnie Smith Yackel does not deserve the Social Security death benefit. Mrs. Smith chose to marry and become a housewife so sure she worked but never worked by government standards. She worked hard day to day to provide for her family not to make money. The father on the other hand worked to make money that earned him benefits for his survivors. Martha Smith is only doing her part in the marriage. She tended to the livestock and maintained the fields. As a homemaker on a farm she had to make pillows, mattresses and can food. Her husband worked to buy all the things she was working so hard to maintain, but we do not know this. The author’s whole point of the essay is to make the reader feel sympathy for her mother, because of the hardships she went through working on a farm while raising eight children, which leads us to believe she is deserving of the Social Security benefit check. Reading the essay over, it is clear to me she does not deserve any benefits due to her mother’s death.

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

My Mother Never Worked

by Bonnie Smith-Yackel

“Social Security Office.” (The voice answering the telephone sounds

very self-assured.)

“I’m calling about…I…my mother just died…I was told to call you

and see about a…death-benefit check, I think they call it…”

“I see.Was your mother on Social Security? How old was she?”

“Yes…she was seventy-eight…”

“Do you know her number?”

“No…I,ah…don’t you have a record?”

“Certainly. I’ll look it up.Her name?”

“Smith.Martha Smith. Or maybe she used Martha Ruth

Smith…Sometimes she used her maiden name…Martha Jerabek

Smith.”

“If you’d care to hold on, I’ll check our records—it’ll be a few minutes.”

“Yes…”

Her love letters—to and from Daddy—were in an old box, tied with

ribbons and stiff, rigid-with-age leather thongs: 1918 through 1920;

hers written on stationery from the general store she had worked in

full-time and managed, single-handed, after her graduation from high

school in 1913; and his, at first, on YMCA or Soldiers and Sailors Club

Professional Model 3.3

stationery dispensed to the fighting men of World War I. He wooed her

thoroughly and persistently by mail, and though she reciprocated all

his feeling for her, she dreaded marriage…

“It’s so hard for me to decide when to have my wedding day—that’s

all I’ve thought about these last two days. I have told you dozens of times

that I won’t be afraid of married life, but when it comes down to setting

the date and then picturing myself a married woman with half a dozen

or more kids to look after, it just makes me sick…I am weeping right

now—I hope that some day I can look back and say how foolish I was to

dread it all.”

They married in February, 1921, and began farming.Their first baby, a

daughter, was born in January, 1922, when my mother was 26 years old.

The second baby, a son, was born in March, 1923.They were renting

farms;my father, besides working his own fields, also was a hired man for

two other farmers.They had no capital initially, and had to gain it slowly,

working from dawn until midnight every day.My town-bred mother

learned to set hens and raise chickens, feed pigs, milk cows, plant and

harvest a garden, and can every fruit and vegetable she could scrounge.

She carried water nearly a quarter of a mile from the well to fill her wash

boilers in order to do her laundry on a scrub board. She learned to shuck

grain, feed threshers, shock and husk corn, feed corn pickers. In

September, 1925, the third baby came, and in June, 1927, the fourth

child—both daughters. In 1930,my parents had enough money to buy

their own farm, and that March they moved all their livestock and

belongings themselves, 55 miles over rutted, muddy roads.

In the summer of 1930 my mother and her two eldest children

reclaimed a 40-acre field from Canadian thistles, by chopping them all

out with a hoe. In the other fields, when the oats and flax began to head

out, the green and blue of the crops were hidden by the bright yellow

of wild mustard.My mother walked the fields day after day, pulling each

mustard plant. She raised a new flock of baby chicks—500—and she

spaded up, planted, hoed, and harvested a half-acre garden.

During the next spring their hogs caught cholera and died.No cash

that fall.

And in the next year the drought hit.My mother and father trudged

from the well to the chickens, the well to the calf pasture, the well to the

barn, and from the well to the garden.The sun came out hot and bright,

endlessly, day after day.The crops shriveled and died.They harvested half

the corn, and ground the other half, stalks and all, and fed it to the cattle

as fodder.With the price at four cents a bushel for the harvested crop,

they couldn’t afford to haul it into town.They burned it in the furnace for

fuel that winter.

In 1934, in February, when the dust was still so thick in the

Minnesota air that my parents couldn’t always see from the house to

the barn, their fifth child—a fourth daughter—was born.My father

hunted rabbits daily, and my mother stewed them, fried them, canned

them, and wished out loud that she could taste hamburger once more.

In the fall the shotgun brought prairie chickens, ducks, pheasant, and

grouse.My mother plucked each bird, carefully reserving the breast

feathers for pillows.

In the winter she sewed night after night, endlessly, begging cast-off

clothing from relatives, ripping apart coats, dresses, blouses, and trousers

to remake them to fit her four daughters and son. Every morning and

every evening she milked cows, fed pigs and calves, cared for chickens,

picked eggs, cooked meals,washed dishes, scrubbed floors, and tended

and loved her children. In the spring she planted a garden once more,

dragging pails of water to nourish and sustain the vegetables for the

family. In 1936 she lost a baby in her sixth month.

In 1937 her fifth daughter was born. She was 42 years old. In 1939 a

second son, and in 1941 her eighth child—and third son.

But the war had come, and prosperity of a sort.The herd of cattle

had grown to 30 head; she still milked morning and evening.Her garden

was more than a half acre—the rains had come, and by now the

Rural Electricity Administration and indoor plumbing. Still she sewed—

dresses and jackets for the children, housedresses and aprons for herself,

weekly patching of jeans, overalls, and denim shirts. She still made

pillows, using the feathers she had plucked, and quilts every year—

intricate patterns as well as patchwork, stitched as well as tied—all

necessary bedding for her family. Every scrap of cloth too small to be

used in quilts was carefully saved and painstakingly sewed together in

strips to make rugs. She still went out in the fields to help with the haying

whenever there was a threat of rain.

In 1959 my mother’s last child graduated from high school. A year

later the cows were sold. She still raised chickens and ducks, plucked

feathers,made pillows, baked her own bread, and every year made a new

quilt—now for a married child or for a grandchild.And her garden, that

huge, undying symbol of sustenance, was as large and cared for as in all

the years before.The canning, and now freezing, continued.

In 1969, on a June afternoon, mother and father started out for town

so that she could buy sugar to make rhubarb jam for a daughter who

lived in Texas.The car crashed into a ditch. She was paralyzed from the

waist down.

In 1970 her husband,my father, died.My mother struggled to regain

some competence and dignity and order in her life.At the rehabilitation

institute, where they gave her physical therapy and trained her to live

usefully in a wheelchair, the therapist told me:“She did fifteen pushups

today—fifteen! She’s almost seventy-five years old! I’ve never known a

woman so strong!”

From her wheelchair she canned pickles, baked bread, ironed clothes,

wrote dozens of letters weekly to her friends and her “half dozen or more

kids,”and made three patchwork housecoats and one quilt. She made

***** and ***** of carpet rags—enough for five rugs.And kept all her love

letters.

“I think I’ve found your mother’s records—Martha Ruth Smith; married

to Ben F. Smith?

“Yes, that’s right.”

“Well, I see that she was getting a widow’s pension…”

“Yes, that’s right.”

“Well, your mother isn’t entitled to our $225 death benefit.”

“Not entitled! But why?”

The voice on the telephone explained patiently:

“Well, you see—your mother never worked.”

Clive · Answer

Hi,

My mother worked very hard all her life, but she never had a job. When I called the Social Security Office, they just said that my mother had never worked.

Best wishes, Clive

Anonymous · Answer

The post-war baby boom began during world WarII and ended in the 1960s. Baby boom got its named from a New York Post editor, who refers to the increase of the birth rate to “boom” (little 1). There were appomaticly 3,548,000 babies born in the 1950-1960s 78.2 million Americans born (little 2). I ‘m going to talk about the affects on the baby boom to the economic, political and social.

Before the increase number of births, there was a Great Depression and a war. People were worried about the low birth rate. So people started having many babies. This caused the birth rate to rise. Creating the “baby boom” (little 3). It was recorded that 1.5 babies were born.

Another increase was marriage rate. In order to have babies, they had to marry. Women and men began marrying after high school. While some wives stood home. Men went to work to provide for the family. Men commuted to work on the INTERTROCHANTERIC railroad(little 4). Families went to places such as Disney land parks and asmument parks.

Another problem with the family was with men and women. Women were expected to stay home while men worked. But before the boom, women were working. Due to the fact that men were in the war, so the women had to support the family. This caused a problem for the men who returned from the war. Many marriages ended in divorcer.

Market places increase, people began buying more items. Also new products emerged, such as washing machines, dryers, benders, freezers, and dishwashers; record players. Market places came up with an idea to make the products that would wear out easily. So they could come back and buy more. This helped to keep business running more effiencely.

People began buying purchases on credit. Creating the idea of the credit card. Items that you purchase with credit cards was houses, cars, and miscoulence items. When people buy later, it causes debt to grow $73 billion to $179 billion(little 5). Advertisements also help with the deb. People were being purchasing things they don’t need.

Because of Advisement people began using more television, radios, newspapers and magazines. They began making up new ideas for selling. The adverstmne was based on the values they normally use. Such as household, electrons and internment items. Television became powerful adverstiment tool.

In order to solve the housing crisis after the return of the veterans. William Levitt and Henry created the suburbs(little 6). The suburbs were located near the city. This helped the to prepare for the increase number of birth.

Since most of the economy was recovering teens got a chance to be themselves and enjoy their youth. Instead of working to help support their families during the war. Teens were also buyers; they brought comic books, pimple creams, and soft drinks (little 7). Movies even began producing movies, just for teens and even rock ‘n’ roll teens liked.

African Americans came up with beats that went with blues music. In order to do this they played the blues by electronic instruments. New music began to grow such as country and pop. Fred came up with the name rock ‘n’ roll, which was liked by whites. Rock ‘n’ roll was greatly amined to teens.

Some popular artist were Richard Penniman, Church Berry Haley, and His comets, and Elvis Presley. These songs consist of love, cars and problems of being young. Young people looked up to Elvis Presley. His rebellious style captivated young audiences. People believed that rock ‘n’ roll would lead teenagers to become a delinquent and immorality.

Television was a new form of entirement. It used light speed to communicate with large audience. Estimated that 9% of had television at their homes. Early televisions sets were small boxes with round screens. The programs were meager and broadcasts were in black and white.

Television began to change during the Post War II. When they transmit television waves over long distances, stations began to broadcast. During the 1950s, television came up with comedy. Favorite children programs were Mickey Mouse Club and The Howdy Doody Show. Television allowed new business oppourities such as; frozen TV dinners and TV Guide.

Radio stations included programs for the local news, weather, music, and community issues. Radio also began partipating in adverstiment. This allowed radio percentages to rise 35%. Also the number of radio stations increase by 50%( little 8). The television effected the radio and movies theaters. Movies were better than television because of the size, color and stereophonic sound. Movies even began producing in color and three-dimensional images.

For people in the suburbs most places were not in walking distance. Such as schools, stores, synagogues, churches, doctors and dentist. Also public transportation was only in the cities. Since more people were driving, they had to create more roads and highways. These roads made it convient to get to stores, school, shopping centers and working places.

Since driving was increasing, it provided jobs in other areas. Job like drive in movies, restaurants, and shopping malls. Even through automobiles helped people to get where they had to go. It also created problems such as; mobile accidents, environment pollution, peoples stress rate increase and road damages. People with money began traveling to leave the city. This made more job opportitues available for people in the suburbs. This eventually created a problem with lower, upper, and middle class people.

The arrival of the television led to opposing view points. Some shows people felt that it had a bad effect on children, women, and others. Women appeared in stereotypical roles in shows such as; the ideal mothers of “father knows Best” and the adventures of Ozzie and Harriet(little 10). Males appeared the most on television then women. Some raciest such as African American and Latinos rarely appeared in television programs. Television only showed the idea of a white person.

Since many middle class people left the cities for the suburbs. This made other races and social feel like they don’t belong. Cities were mainly filled with African Americans, and other races. The urban crisis directly impacted on poor whites and non whites. Since the middle class moved, this affected business. The increase birth rate, got prepare for the new babies, now they moved out.

Leaving schools, business, public transportation and police and fire departments to suffer. Many people didn’t even have enough money to survival. Groups such as African Americans, Native Americans and Latinos had lived in dirty, crowded slums. Then to fix this problem congress passed the urban renewal. This help to reconstruct poor areas, such as shopping centers, parks, highways, parking lots, and factories.

Some poor people left, but other poor had to move from one ghetto to another.

Jazz came in the picture by African Americans. The racial gap was that African Americans music was broad cast on separate stations. Even through African Americans appeared on television, they appear rarely on radios. This made African Americans feel segregate.

To sum it up the baby boom had a lot of causes and effects on the social, political and economic. Many people had to adjust to changes that were made. I think the baby boom also helped with us getting to where we are to the economic, political, and social changes that occurred around this world.

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