Can someone please revise my motivation letter?

Hey guys, I just wrote a motivation letter and I would like you to tell me if you think it's good enough. Please correct me grammatically as well. Cheers!



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Dear Sir/Madam,



My name is X and I am applying to the International Communication and Media program at Hogeschool Utrecht, for the 2010/2011 term.



Although I am a European citizen (German), I have decided to write a motivation letter due to the fact that my situation is a little bit different than other students applying to the university. When I was in high school I was diagnosed with ADD, so concentrating in classes wasn't an easy thing to do. Being a young girl, I didn't believe in myself enough to motivate myself, and so I ended up not finishing my exams and hence not getting my Bagrut.

After finishing 12 years of school I have joined the Israeli Defense Forces for two obligatory years. During my service as an adjutancy secretary for the reserves, I have grown up a lot and realized I am not the type of person to give up, and that I will succeed in life and achieve everything I dream of.

After successfully finishing my army service, I have enrolled in 's Foundation Course. This course gives the students the tools to succeed in university, along with sitting the tests needed for a qualification equivalent to the Bagrut (this certificate is acceptable in and most of the colleges in ). I have done extremely well in these course and exams, which motivated to continue on to getting a BA.



I would like to study abroad because I believe it will give me an opportunity to learn new languages, meet new people and learn about other cultures. I am fascinated by different ways of life and I love to investigate them. I believe studying in an international communication program in will provide me with the tools to understand more about different ways to communicate. I think communication is one of the most important aspects in life nowadays, I think media can make or break a person, a company or even a nation, and this is why I am so fascinated by it. I think I have a lot to bring to the table, being an Israeli. We, in , have a very unique culture, and we also have to deal with a lot of media misjudgment. I have also travelled the world, and I have lived in Canada for two months, USA for three months and for thirteen months. I am studying Spanish and I speak a little bit of German thanks to my German grandmother. I would like to learn German and Dutch too.



In conclusion, I know I might not meet the initial requirements, but I am a very passionate person and I am so eager to get into the university and succeed. I would appreciate it a lot if you would give me the chance to prove myself to you. As I mentioned before, I would definitely benefit from studying on your school, and I also think the school could benefit from me. I believe I could have a bright future if you give me the opportunity to enroll in the ICM program. I also appreciate the time and attention spent on considering my motivation letter.



Yours faithfully,

X