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Rcook11x Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Can someone please review this paragraph? :)
Can someone please review this paragraph? 
Another challenge that I worked hard to overcome was making the basketball team. I first started getting serious about playing basketball after I was cut from the team several times in middle school. When this happened, I vowed to myself to practice every day until I became the best player that I could be. I went to work and practiced hours on end to better myself. Being cut from the team so many times and practicing hard enabled me to walk into tryouts when I was in the 10th grade with confidence. I knew I was one of the best and I made the team, but I didn’t stop there. I kept working hard and made the varsity team in 11th grade. I was not satisfied with the way I played during my junior year so I fixed some holes in my game and came back my senior year even better. So much better that I was good enough lead my team and be one of the leading scorers in my district. After my senior basketball season ended I was honored as an All-Conference player.
Another challenge that I worked hard to overcome was making the basketball team. I first started getting serious about playing basketball after I was cut from the team several times in middle school. When this happened, I vowed to myself to practice every day until I became the best player that I could be. I went to work and practiced hours on end to better myself. Being cut from the team so many times and practicing hard enabled me to walk into tryouts when I was in the 10th grade with confidence. I knew I was one of the best and I made the team, but I didn’t stop there. I kept working hard and made the varsity team in 11th grade. I was not satisfied with the way I played during my junior year so I fixed some holes in my game and came back my senior year even better. So much better that I was good enough lead my team and be one of the leading scorers in my district. After my senior basketball season ended I was honored as an All-Conference player.
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rcook11x Being cut from the team so many times and practicing hard enabled me to walk into tryouts when I was in the 10th grade with confidence. "with confidence" belongs to the phrase "walk into tryouts". Suggestion: "walk into tryouts with confidence" rcook11x So much better that I was good enough lead my team and be one of the leading scorers in my district.
- rcook11x Being cut from the team so many times and practicing hard enabled me to walk into tryouts when I was in the 10th grade with confidence.
- "with confidence" belongs to the phrase "walk into tryouts".
- Suggestion: "walk into tryouts with confidence" rcook11x So much better that I was good enough lead my team and be one of the leading scorers in my district.
- This is an incomplete sentence.
- Suggestion: "I became so much better that I led my team and became one of the leading scorers in my district.
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rcook11xBeing cut from the team so many times and practicing hard enabled me to walk into tryouts when I was in the 10th grade with confidence."with confidence" belongs to the phrase "walk into tryouts". Suggestion: "walk into tryouts with confidence"
rcook11xSo much better that I was good enough lead my team and be one of the leadin
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